All Comments on 'Sisters of Upper Priam College'

There were several minor errors throughout it all, but besides that...one of the most enjoyable stories i've ever read, great characterization throughout and magnificent story told!

Towards the end, the editing fell apart. Wrong words, wrong names, events in the wrong order. Get a good editor, and this story could be one of my favorites!

this is truly an amazing story, i'm not even overreacting

i have seen a lot of great and steaming hot stories, but this one def. is in the top 3 of all time

although the other guys were right, the last couple of chapters had the occassional error (wrong name etc) but those were minor things

i truly love your story

especcially an occassional side sex scene, for example in this story Kilee walks in on 2 girls jacking each other off, love stuff like that

should you need a bit of inspiration, could i suggest some kind of sequel? maybe the same storyline, but from the POV of a different tranny girl, for example Bethany Lewis (near the bottom of page 5)

should you still question my eternal love for you as an author, i quickly made an account for this

Amazing! I cannot describe how great that was! Keep it up!

Beautiful story from beginning to end. Nicely plotted and paced, full of tension and a few surprises. And marvelously written sexy. This is a winner indeed. Thanks.

I loved the story so much from begining to end. If ever there was a story to be an example for five stars this would be it. I wish you could right novels I would totally buy your books

A beautiful story and so excelently told...

Thank you

I would love to be one of those girls. Oooooh tongue-ing that ass and titty fucking in a glorious 69er soooo goood!!! I would love to be Kilee those two delicious girlie dicks...mmm. Any takers whoopee?

but it could have been so much more with the help of a good editor. You misuse of past and present tense, as well as incorrect word usage detracted from what was an otherwise very interesting read.

what afantastic story! loved every word! wish i could have been part of it!!!!!!! Definitely .y new favorite!!!!!!

Please, please, please, in future use the spellcheck. This is a great story that is slightly spoiled by mis-spellings.

Thank you I loved this story and would have loved to have any one of the girls as my partner.

Dude, do you know the difference between the words 'said' and 'explained'? For that matter do you know what the word 'explain' even means? There was so much 'explaining' going on in this story that I felt like a fucking retard. I felt that unless your characters 'explained' shit, I wouldn't get what they were 'saying'.

Also, did you know you can't get 'passed' an event, but you can sure as fuck get 'past' it.

You know, there is this tiny little concept called proof-reading, where you go through the shit you have spouted to check for any grammatical errors BEFORE you post it. You don't even need a fucking editor to that stuff, its pretty easy to do it yourself. But then again, maybe you do need one. Because after all the 'explaining' you did here, I seriously doubt that English is your first language.

Anyways, without all that shit distracting us from the story, it was quite a nice piece. Though, Kilee did come off as kind of a selfish bitch, whether that was intentional or not. So, cheers on your mighty accomplishment.

I agree with both Anonymous and Diablo.

You have a lot of grammatical errors that need correcting and most times you can't even see the error yourself or you wouldn't have made the error in the first place. So you do need someone to proofread and/or edit your stories. I'm there are lots of people on here who would do that for you. I do some for a few people on here and enjoy it.

I would also be happy to have someone like one of those girls as a partner. I've never had the chance to meet a TS but I'm always attracted to them when I see photos of them. I've got a video of a pretty black girl with a big cock that I've watched many times and will keep doing so.

Great story! Would make a great video.

i got lost in the story. Loved the whole thing. Would love to hear a continuation or other hot events that happen in the house. The pool is interesting oppurtunity. New pledges come in, and they try to hide their cocks. Kylie being a crazy sexy girl runs the sorority in her won specia way. There's a lot that can be expanded in this. And I've enjoyed all your other stories

I love this story would love to read more I could not stop reading it looking forword to more

Thank you for your writing.

I've got to agree with others comments. I really enjoyed the story and found it to be very sexy. Watch out using a spell checker, just because it doesn't find any mis-spelled words doesn't mean you have used the right word. Please proofread your work, slowly if need be, to make sure you've got everything right. But please do keep writing, your work is very hot and sexy. kisses.....Amie

This I my first of your stories that I read. I’ll always remember it. Thanks for the memories <3

Why was the protag such a cunt?

I read what you said on your Bio page about using 'porn' terms, so it sounds like you are a thoughtful person, trying to be responsible, and not degrade an already over-abused portion of our society.

I an old fuck, pushing 70, and have watched a lot of change in our society. I can remember thinking about the changes my grandmother went through, born in 1888, and living to 97. She literally went from candles and fires all the time, horseshit and the constant smell to indoor plumbing, electricity and jet airplanes.

My mom, (1921-1993), went from an age of radio and wooden wheels cars to computers, and space travel, (at least to the moon), being common.

I've lived through a massive change in our technological world, but more so, I've lived across massive social change. Racism was alive and well when I was a kid; (luckily the small town I lived in didn't experience it, firsthand. We had Hispanics, Asians, and a multitude of European ethnicities, and a few balck families, but I never heard anything negative, or racist said by my peers, or by parents. That's not to say there wasn't systemic racism, or attitudes about 'others', elsewhere in the country, but not about the residents of our town. I've thought about it a lot, and it is baffling to me.

I've also seen amazing progress for LGB persons. There were LG people in our town, and we all knew who they were, but again, there wasn't any outward bias towards them. The worst damage I saw was from the need to stay closeted, and the self-hate caused by lack of open acceptance. i had a very good friend end his life because he couldn't be himself; but there were positive stories as well. My best friend from second grade, my first real friend at a new school is still with the woman she met growing up, the older sister of another good friend.

Our society is finally waking up about the extent of systemic racism and the decades, (centuries?) of problems that has caused. It's about time. What I truly think will be discovered about the horrid problem of police violence is it is not JUST racism; it is classism, basic bigotry.

In my own experience, it doesn't matter what color you are, there are certain cops, (people?), who look for some reason to make themselves feel superior, &/or give them self-justification for their actions. Be it color of skin, length of hair, or poverty, some cops will just look for a reason to fuck with you, or beat your ass. There are just certain people who should NOT be given the power police have; it fucks them up, and they abuse it.

My first ass neating by the cops was when I was 19. My 'offense'? I had long hair, and chose to observe the arrest of a Native American friend who was turning himself in, on an outstanding warrant. He was trying to do the right thing, and they neat his ass, anyway. At about a minute in, I spoke up, from 20 feet away, and said, 'That's probably enough since he WAS turning himself in; don't ya think?'

I woke up after they were gone, lying on the lawn of my GF's small apt complex, with my head in her lap, and her freaking out. One of the deputies, (they brought four cars of deputies to his brother's apt to pick up someone turning themselves in on a NON-violent warrant offense), came around behind me, and clubbed me while several others were threatening me with arrest, etc, for my comment.

The last experience where the cop would have loved to beat my ass happened two years ago, (I'm 67), because I confronted him about carelessly standing on newly planted ground cover, for no reason other than he didn't care. I was in filthy clothes, and needed a shave cause I'd been working on my house, and I came around my front hedge, dragging a hose, to water the plants.

He was standing right on them, talking with 2 cops, fire chief, and a couple of EMT's firemen when I said, 'Sure, just stand right on my plantings.'

He took one look at me, judged me on my appearance, and chose to lie, "What plants? All I see are some weeds." When I didn't backdown from his puffed up chest, and dominant stance, and replied, 'Yeah, I was coming out here to water weeds...', not needing to finish the sentence with, 'you dumbass.' I could see the faces of the others, he could not; their jaws dropped at his behavior.

It was on from there. He took 2-3 strides towards me, and I didn't move, looked him right in the eyes. You know how it's said there are some animals you should avoid eye contact with? Cops are the same. They do not like it, if they are trying to intimidate/dominate you.

When I didn't say anything, or look away, he went on a lying rant about how I was interferring with his important duties. What he didn't know was I had been on my roof watching the entire episode, unfold. The cops were the last to arrive and the woman passenger who had a psychotic meltdown while this young Hispanic kid was simply driving down the street, giving her a ride was already in the ambulance, and they were simply wrapping up.

I saw the Hispanic kid in our overly white suburb, and decided it was time to water, in case things went sideways on him. (his car ended up overheating while everything unfolded, and I helped him, afterwards, and got then entire story.)

After the display by the cop, his aggression and two blatants lies, I simply said, 'I have had enough of you. I want your badge number, NOW.' He flipped out further, and then I allowed myself to give some voice to the situation. We ended up shouting at each other, until two different neighbors came out to see what the eff was going on.

I pushed him, verbally, just to see how crazy he was, knowing it he cracked, I would sue the fuck out of the city. But, I also have enough physical issues without adding to them. BUt, as I stood there, I couldn't help but think about the 50 years I had been witnessing, and experiencing this kind of bigotry from cops.

So, I can empathisize with social groups who have been oppressed and fucked with by society, while still understanding I've received much simply via 'white privledge'.

The last group I'm seeing fighting for acceptance is transgender persons. We're in the midst of reactions to their recent gains. Just like the prominence of white supremicists has been a reaction to having a half white President, (funny how he became a 'black' president, instead a biracial, or mixed race Prez. It's the old racist measuring stick: if there's any in you, you're a...)

Transgenders will overcome, and gain status, in the end. Societal evolution can not be stopped, no more than biological evolution can. I truly believe in another 100 years, having 3, possibly 4 genders, will be the norm. It will ancestors of mine who will live through, and witness it.

There was actually a reason I wanted to comment, related to the story, not just to write a friggin' essay.

As a responsible person, you need to alao be aware when you are describing extremely unsafe sex practices. This is not a Futa or Furry fantasy, nor a SciFi, where you have established a wide field of suspension of disbelief. You have written a fiction about regular life, even those it may be a transgender's dream world, it more likely to be reality than Furries, Futas and aliens, within a short period of time.

Your characters have NO discussion of, NOR enact any preparation before engaging in anal sex. The practices you have portrayed as seemingly normal transgender-transgender sex is highly dangerous from a health perspective.

You have likely heard of typhoid, cholera, dissentary, just to name a few. They have all been caused/spread by lack of adequate waste disposal, in the past, and in the present, in under-developed countries. Humans CANNOT consume their waste without disasterous results.

You really need to consider this. There are no age restrictions to viewing Lit stories. How would you like to be responsible for illness or death because someone read your work and considered these practices safe?

I'm not hating on you, just asking you to think about your actions, and the potential consequences.

GeoD

Awesome story enough said

What a wonderful story. I really love the way all the girls had a relationship and how they all loved it so much.

Wonderful sexy story and end results! Mutual sexual pleasure!

Thanks for this sexy story