All Comments on 'Sitting in the Park'

by brownbeauty

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tenstensover 12 years ago
Holy crap!

That was so real it nearly makes one wonder if it actually happened. "Are they gonna do it?" was a question constantly running through my head. In retrospect, the conclusion was inevitable, however, I was full of anxiety because the characters didn't know what was going to happen! I thought your story was perfect; it was like a tiny short story with the right amount of suspense and passion.

grunabonagrunabonaover 12 years ago
*****

Excellent.

Five.

tootalldaytootalldayover 12 years ago
Everyone isn't cut out for the rat race...

I think what you meant was "Not everyone is cut out for the rat race..." The way you expressed it actually means, "No one is cut out for the rat race..." and I'm sure that wasn't your intent.

EroticLitKittyEroticLitKittyover 12 years ago
Wow!

5 stars and quite possibly the shortest bit of perfection ever ;-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
5 stars!!

Oooohhh my gosh.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Damn! Is that it???

GauchoManGauchoManover 7 years ago
Well Done

Very Nicely done BrownBeauty ....

I love the details, your pace and the restraint.

No screaming and shouting ... just the crunch of dry leaves ! Lovely

hunghandsumhunghandsumover 6 years ago
Sitting in the Park 02

Well written and certainly deserves a followup! You've certainly left things at a point that there are infinite possibilities.

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