All Comments on 'Slave Fantasy Ch. 03'

please continue this story very nice

You could feel that was real - her slowly building and begging for him almost. Got to be a pt3!!!!

More Please!

I'm looking forward to more installments as this couple explore their love and slavery.

Very well done mostly. Leave out the long drawn out Uuuhhhhh and Ooooohhh stuff. Use words to describe. This just detracts. Twas my only complaint.

You're story's pretty good, but does not compare to the majority of WM/BF stories on the site.

I read the first part and sent you feed back asking you to lay off of the Ooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh noooooooooooooooos. But you couldn't do it, so I cannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn't in allllllllllllllllllllllllll good conscience continue to read this. It's a shame as it was kind of hoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooot.

A good read with great details, but as two other readers commented, the extended bits of moaning and groaning presented as dialogue did more harm than good to your tale.

Chapter 3 is definitely the best of the bunch. Keep writing, and I'm sure more constructive criticisms will follow. Take them and run with it.

The story was hot and jumping of the pages but what would make this story even hotter [if that is even possible] would have been to use more descriptive words in place of the many "OOOHHHHH's and Ugggghhhh's"

Nevertheless this was an orgasmic fuckfest of reading!!!!

Loved the part where the main character receives the slave outfit from her master, and her reaction to it. So hot to see this forbidden fantasy melt a strong 21st century gal into a moist, puppy-eyed bundle of sub-sluttiness. More, please! Can he take her further?

Even though the critical comments below are valid, overall this was a very good effort, so I'm still giving this chapter a top score.

I'm giving this a 100 even though all the looooooonnnng moans and grunts and such continue, but I really like this story.

It's just those loooong sound effects again on the second page that are a bit too much. Still have to give it five stars though.

I love your stories . More would be so nice . :D

All three chapters were some of the best writing that I've had the chance to read on Literotica - and the story itself only makes me want to fulfill this fantasy as a white man's bed wench even more (well, just once)!

Thank you so much for making a white male / black woman coupling that does not use the N-word!! The absence of that evil word just made the story that much more exciting to me...you know a story is great when you as the reader insert yourself as the main character!

Anyway, my only suggestion is that you substitute the word "slave" with wench, gal, bitch,or any other word that cut downs on the repetitiveness...

Well thanks again for one of the best stories EVER!

Gina4whiteguy

soooooo now what

Don't stop now! Well written, vivid, hot story that screams for another chapter!! Some bondage? Some anal? Some punishment? Ssooo many directions you could go!! Looking forward to what your creativity brings ~ meanwhile, back to your library! ;) Thank you

I already have a hot older slave and she is bi so the thought of a young black girl as a sister slave begging for Masters cock after he eats her sweet pussy driving her crazy with lust interests me as this girl knows her place is in pleasing her Big White Master and his Horny Cock.. Then after making her his 3 hole slut like his other slave, she would beg for his seed to impregnate her and give her a baby by her Master.. Maybe even another slavegirl