by XXXerxes37
I drudged through the entire story. There is no plot. No real meaning. No relief. You just put all of your stupid perversions into this story against this character and there is no real thought in it. You have to have a storyline, otherwise people will NOT enjoy what you are writing.
your hole slave girl story is way too sick you belong in jail and I hope you end up there as some big guys slave and he does so much more to you
that was great but there must be another chapter to finally end it. weather they stay together or not