All Comments on 'South Mountain Pack Ch. 02'

Yeah, exact same comments as in previous chapter. Seems highly unrealistic. Would make more sense as a one on one chat between father and son. I'm afraid I'm giving up on this tho. Started falling asleep while reading, bad sign.

Not your average WW story, I’m really loving this, although I’ve got a horrible feeling it’s gonna get dark at some point…..

Many thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz.

So funny - and sweet, too. Really like the description how the teen boys really act like teens. Strong emotions uncertainty etc. And how the will to protect whom they love (mate, daughters and sisters) shows up, both in the boys and there father. As a widow to a soldier I can relate.

Awesome development of the characters.

I'm crying.

I am crying.

I'M FUCKING CRYING TEARS OF LAUGHTER!!!!!

Omg who fucking wrote this, and HOW??!!!

Omg - POCKET BOOK LOVER!!!

AHAHAHAHA OMG OMG OMG

I LOVE THIS, I LOVE YOU, I AM A HAPPY WOMAN!!

FUNNY!!!!! You have talent.

Oh my goodness, I laughed so hard I had tears in my eyes during this chapter.

Hilarious.

So funny - the stories were gold that the dads told and the one Damian and Vince told about going to the shop and getting pads and tampons - so funny.

Loving this story

I died at those stories, funniest thing ever..and poor Anthony how is he going to survive when he is always going to be walking around half cocked

*****

When are you posting the next chapter?

Not really what I was looking to read on a site called Lit"erotica." Maybe you could move this to fiction press or a young adult site?

So far this sounds like the adult version of "Father Knows Best", not a rousing werewolf story... what gives?

I love how the insta love isn't settled by go fuck each other. I like how there is going to be a delay on when they actually do the dirty. I hate to admit it but with a number of the storys it is sort of 'omfg I love her lets go screw our brains out.' I far and away prefer something that is ether a slow build up or 'he/she is cute' but takes time to develop. I am rather enjoying this story.

((Ignore the typo's since I am sort of having a panick attack.

Had me bust out laughing a few times and I'm reading at 1 o'clock in the morning next to my sleeping husband. Lol I can't wait to read how the girls talk went.

While I agree that at this point intime and place in the story it's more something I would expect to read on Wattpad in the ware/vap young adult section it's brilliantly written and extremely funny. Absoloutly brilliant and keep it up can't wait to read more but had to comment on this one before I read on to the next. Xx

Why are they always following her is she a princess or anything gosh give her some room. The story seems child like and the men seem like boys, make them more mature.

great cant wait for more

I loved your story and you brought me in instantly... I also liked that you made your readers laugh, that's important in a great story... Thank you keep up the good work

Is this supposed to be a comedy???I think its great writing,and very entertaining,but the adult men seem more im-mature than most Alphas or betas,and the kids,lol,,,good read,just so funny.

I was laughing so hard that my left shoulder started hurting!

The dads talk like 14 year old boys, which is quite distasteful. The 'voice' of the story is just very young and shallow. The storyline is okay and has the potential to be good if you make the characters more like real people. Add some depth and detail and you'll have a much better story.

I loved both chapters an easy favourite. I just hope there's some diversity that you brought up in the first chapter especially with the new family. I love reading stories that reflect diversity and growth

I love this charpter you had me laughing so hard I cant wait for the womens chapter....i just love it keep up the good work

This was hilarious and great.i want to read the next chapter, and soon!! :D

Freakin' hilarious! I love it. Keep the stories coming.

amazing chapter and so very funny

Great so heard then male point of view, now I need balance and want the female point of view. I hope it is backed with as much laughter as this one :)

LOVE THIS STORY !!! Can't wait till the next chapter

Great job with this chapter...it was totally funny. I love how the pack has the laws and rules to make sure the mates don't do anything foolish. Anthony is going to suffer greatly having to wait 3 years to have sexual relations with his mate.

I can't wait to find out how the females talk went. I hope it will be as funny as the guys.

please send chapter soon loved this so much

is scott going to be a problem since he should know the pack laws too? what about the in bound family with the 10 females that i still think will match up nicely with the 10 carluci boys

J'AI ADORÉ ! I HAD TO READ THIS STORY TWICE CAUSE I COULDN'T STOP LAUGHING WHILE I WAS READING IT THE FIRST TIME . IT WAS'T MUCH BETTER THE SECOND TIME AROUND EITHER. I'M STILL LAUGHING. I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT INSTALLMENT TO POST. I LOVE READING A STORY WHEN I CAN FEEL AS IF I'M RIGHT THERE IN THE MIST OF WHAT'S OCCURRING.

Hey, enjoyed this chapter a lot. Great work, hope to read more soon.

Darn dang it, now the fun really picks up here. Had a hard time reading it cause I almost laughed myself silly. I want to read the rest aswell now, hoping its just as fun to read