All Comments on 'Succubus'

by JonnyD1

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago

I loved it! Very entertaining :)

SimoneLisbonSimoneLisbonabout 12 years ago
Excellent Story

I'm so glad you got around to posting this wonderful story. I love the rewrites and the flow, it's an excellent story. Keep writing Dan and thank you for the love in the opening, made me blush...

Simone

THROBBSTHROBBSabout 11 years ago
Very fun!

I enjoyed the story, but there were a few bits which took me out of the world.

"The year was 1887, late fall."

zippers were not invented until 1893. :) bra invented 1889

panties???

And some of the language struck me as a bit too contemporary.

Minor details to be sure, and I am not much of a stickler or historian, but for whatever reason I noted these things.

BTW a fellow litster directed me to your story, and I am glad of it.

OneShotOneOneShotOnealmost 11 years ago
Very good story

Fun with an ending rife with possibilities.

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