Summer Pleasures

Malcolm may be a writer of erotic fiction, but this author isn't.

This was fairly well-written. But I think it would have read better if broken up into four or five chapters. The plot seemed to repeat itself over and over. Each time Chrissie screwed John, it seemed to be almost a repeat of the last. It finally sunk into Chrissie's mind that she didn't like it when John fell for her older sister Fran. Chrissie became possessive and jealous. Maybe she realized what Jerry was feeling before she left for Chicago this last time.

After all, she took her escapades too far past her husband Jerry's fantasy, and it showed when she was leaving for Chicago to be with John -- Jerry sensed that Chrissie was falling in love with John -- it wasn't "just sex" anymore. I think it would have been just a matter of time before she left Jerry for John, so she could have the better sex and companionship she clearly craved. The only thing that really saved Jerry's place in her heart was John's sudden relationship with sister Fran.

No matter how she professed her love for Jerry, a woman like Chrissie can't help but lose respect for a wimpy man with a small-cock complex who wants to share his wife with someone who is a better lover. The thing that struck me throughout this story is that Chrissie had far too much time on her hands. It seemed Jerry did all the work for their investigations business while Chrissie was always playing, that is, fucking around.

If Chrissie worked all day long, and she was tired out as someone putting in a 10 or 12 hour day would normally be, she would not, repeat would not, have been able to fuck four, five, six times in a row with multiple orgasms, all day and all night. I find it interesting that John lives like a millionaire yet hardly seems to work very many hours, either.

Throughout this long story, there was very little character development. We only know that Jerry enjoyed the cuckold fantasy. We really know nothing else about him, other than near the end when he is going to have to give a report to a male client confirming the client's suspicion that his wife was having an affair. Interesting parallel to Jerry's situation, except Jerry instigated it, and for some reason, got off on it. At least, until he realized he no longer controlled it and Chrissie was emotionally involved with John. Thanks for writing.

After awhile, I was sort of skimming the sex scenes to see what was going to happen. Anyway, it was an interesting twist on the hot wife theme.

However, neither John or Fran are interesting enough characters to go through all of this again and hear the story from their POV. Give it a rest and write something new. It will improve you as a writer and give us something better as well.

14 pages about a shameless slut and a little cuck, W.T.F.? Would any man even want to admit he knew this slut, I don't think so, dude. Puke.

That would take the place of 30 words.

So after the great amerikan novel about a self absorbed whore we find her going home to hubby. I ask, why would he want her? She's pretty much scratched and dented goods, not to mention likely enjoying a lot of popular diseases. Poor jerry, his wife is a slut and he's an idiot loser.

Next time try to keep it to 3 pages of your prose. Way to long to hear about such a useless slut.