by moonlitclover
I really liked that you mentioned that the relationship wasn't perfect without going into detail. It added a touch of realism without dragging down the mood. Great work!
I remember it fondly. Cute story. Good luck in the contest, MC.
this sounds like an interesting preface to a romance novel...
What a sweet story! Not graphic sex, but a well-written love story that just happens to contain sex.
I loved your story, i am a total romantic so this was right up my alley:) Great job
This was a really good, romantic story, especially the detailed description of the love-making between two people who love each other. I would find one fault - there seemed to be something left out. From this sentence:
"The fruit was all but forgotten as he slid my panties off and rubbed his cheek against my inner thigh."
to this one:
"His hand reached up to tilt my head so that our eyes met as at last his perfect penis was back in my favorite place for it to be."
there should have been a description of his licking and kissing his way up your body until you were face to face. I'm not complaining; it was still an excellent story.
You pack a lot of story into a single page. Sweet and generous with a touch of your trademark humour to cut through the sweetness. I just want to know where to find these women who not only acknowledge the odd irrational moment but also apologise so nicely? Thanks again. -- UK CYNIC
Erotic text messages can add a lot of spark to a relationship, but probably not necessary between these two lovers. Descriptive, erotic, and charming. Great story, with imaginative writing.
it's ok to ignore love of your life and be a man whore with your best buds on a 4 day weekend in vegas. sweetie I hope you told him to be SURE and stop at the corner drug and buy plenty of condoms so he wouldn't drag home VD. your so stup...no, no sweet