All Comments on 'Surprise Adventure in Tokyo'

Repetitious drivel. To long, to much detail about your wardrobe, insipid writing. Good grief what a waste of pixels. Bravo for writing a story though, shitty as it is.

To "Anonymous": Sorry my story didn't please you. I'll work harder next time.

Hi, After thinking about your comment, I wonder if you could provide some suggestions for how to improve my writing. I'm new at fiction writing, so I could use some tips. Thanks much.

Dior 11 - fellow Literotica fan.