by joeroberts
You have a nice writing style, joe, kind of literary but with enough quirk to be catchy. Why doesn't the story get higher ratings? It's a long build-up to . . . what? You handle the erotic scenes with brief summaries. The characters are well-drawn but the situation isn't terribly interesting. What happens is pretty much the minimum, and about what one would expect. You try to make it surprising for the character, but the reader is way out in front in knowing what's coming. So when it arrives, it's sort of ho-hum.
Jeez estragon me old china, where was she when I was 18?
but good stuff, enough anatomy to be getting on with. Sandra is a real character (and where was she when I was 18?). Really well written, but very English for an American audience.
Terse and careful, every word counts. Thank you. You might just appreciate my writing too.