by man_sanas469
Really as good as always. You surely are a talented writer.
I love the way you write.
You are such a wonderful writer....just wish you would do it more often! Loved this one and esp enjoyed how you incorporated characters from your other stories.
I have really enjoyed this story. I suggest you write a second part in which Jasmine and Marie get married after Jasmine proposes and by which Marie takes Jasmine's name losing her maiden one. Then with the help of one of Jasmine's brothers - sperm donation and all that stuff - Marie would get pregnant.
Since you haven't been around in years, I know this is a pointless comment. Still...Marie is from an Asian country where she wasn't allowed to leave her house, yet she's dated men who pressured her for sex? Am I misreading this?
You say because Marie had long brown hair ,almond shaped eyes and brown skin that she couldn't be American? Well let me tell you that is my description to a tee and guess what, i am most definitely American! Other than that idiotic statement, this was a really good story.
This is the third story i've read today and it's a shame there aren't that many from this author. If man_sanas469 is reading this please consider writing more; you have a talent. Thanks.
Cute. Simple. Short. Sweet. And to the point.
From a writer who shined so brightly for such a short time. Wonder what she could've done if she'd gone on...