All Comments on 'Sweet Dreams in Cleveland Ch. 02'

I read both chapters B4 commenting. Not bad stories, but both were hurried. A little teasing or seduction would have been nice. Jumping to it that quick is for people with a history together. Also, us a proof reader. That way you won't spoil things for the reader with mundane errors.

it was a good story but it was a little short. I think that it should be a little longer than what it was. Other than that it was great.

good but it needed a little more background and they should have fooled around as kids to make it realistic also it needs another chapter to tell if they continue to fuck or live together and if the parents find out don't leave us hanging

With a whole lot if editing this could have been A great story

Alot of it sounds more like a 2year old has written it

Verno