All Comments on 'Sweet Sandy Ch. 03'

....very taboo. True, there was cheating, but the later parts were not cheating. There was also sadness, mainly over the death of the wife, whom hubby loved even as he screwed his daughter behind her back at times (cheating is no bar to being in love, it just means an imperfect expression of it). The end, with the daughter getting knocked up by her dad, was awesome, even if it involved a bit of grief. It was certainly stimulating.

The only drawback was that the daughter at times acted younger than her supposed 20 years. Then again, maybe she was just vulnerable and reverted to childish talk in the midst of pain.

The age of the wife seems a bit off, they were married for 22 years, had a 19 year old daughter yet the wife was only in her 30s when she died??

"You see, two months prior we had buried my wife of twenty-two years, Helen. She had died of a particularly aggressive form of cervical cancer. She had only been in her thirties."

I suppose the only logical way is that if they got married at 16 + 22 years = 39 even then it would have been her late 30s early 40s.

Otherwise great story,

You said she was 41.. looked 32 ... died in her 30's??? Now that was a bad fuck up. (a really stupid one, actually) See how it blows the credence of the whole story all to hell? As soon as I saw that, I lost interest in the story and stopped reading it. The story wasn't that realistic to begin with so shame on you for totally killing it.

Would you be satisfied if I edited the story to make the ages more appropriate or believable? Should I change Sandy's character to have her act more mature? I'm not going to do that. The story was written for a particular type of reader, who enjoys a particular type of girl: sweet, innocent, yet sexually precocious. I suppose that I'm learning the hard way that writers who invite criticism are going to have to develop thick skins. I'm sorry that the slight discrepancy about the age caused you to discount the story altogether. It is possible that the father and mother married young--people still do that, you know. And it is possible that they sired a sweet young girl who fell in love with her father. In any case, it's nothing more or less than a fantasy. I simply strove to make it an engaging and romantic one. Sorry if the father doesn't call his daughter a "fucking slut" or "Daddy's little bitch" while he's making love to her. Oldguy45

So you forgot the age of the mother, big deal. Live and learn then move on. The story had nothing to do with the mother anyway. And with the father being in his mid forties isn't a problem either. I know people who are grandparents in their early forties so having a daughter in her late teens/early twenties isn't a stretch at all. Over all I thought the series was very well written.

While the original poster was somewhat of a dick, his point is valid. It wouldn't hurt you to go back and edit the age. He just didn't ask very politely. Please don't get on such a high horse because the comment came from a douchebag.

Loved this series, maybe my favorite story on this site. Great job!

"buried my wife of twenty-two years, Helen. She had died of a particularly aggressive form of cervical cancer. She had only been in her thirties"

Then they couldn't have been married for 22 years, or have that old a daughter. Please fix it. Just change it to in her forties and it works just fine.

I'm sorry, I don't think I can edit the story any more. It's fifteen years old. I'm sorry if the age discrepancy bothers you. Sometimes I miss a detail or two. On the other hand, most people seem to like the story mistake and all. It certainly still arouses me.

Okay guys, I have submitted an edited version of this story with Helen dying in her forties instead of in her thirties. In the original story, I wrote that Helen was 41 years old. and Sandy was nineteen. That would make Helen 22 years old when she had Sandy. In Part 3, I wrote that Helen was a wife of twenty years. That would make Helen 20-21 years old when she got married. I hope this clears up the discrepancy. Thanks, Oldguy 45