All Comments on 'Sweet Shy Allison Brutalized by Dad'

You can't immediately jump from a grotesque rape/abuse scene to mindless sex. Pick one or the other OR actually spend some time developing the story and plot.

You had the start of a very good story. The crap at the end really blew it.

It was written in the style of a child's story, which really made reading it confusing. It did start well but then ..... well.... it just became too fucked up to handle and befuddled my equilibrium. The plot had real potential....

Now this triangle just got better and better. Guy finds hot looking girl, gets her cherry and mom comes along and he gets mom long-lost cherry. Guess the people were in Utah and became a true case of, "I'm my own grandma." Terrific reading and the flow of words came out nicely. Of course there will be some who find fault. Like that is their only reason to read these articles. Someone will ask, "...and you forgot to put a period at the end of..." Ignore them.

Good storyline, but the ending should have been expanded to Sarah and Allison having Danny's children and then the happily ever after. Well done