All Comments on 'Sybian with Friends'

not outstanding. Perhaps it is too pedestrian, slow, and repetitive. The story is about two couples enjoying themselves but the descriptions don't convey that joy.

hi,

I don't know how you write, but I might suggest you run your story through a spelling/grammer checker before submission. I saw a few errors but didn't keep a list. The first I noticed was in the paragragh about refilling Taylor's glass. some of the sentence structureis hard to follow, I know it gets difficult to think about it as you get a bit wound up while writing, at least I do. I would suggest you go slowly, taking paragraphs at random, re-reading them individually so you aren't so excited by the story itself.

I liked it a lot and good luck

pandabare

This was so hot. I loved everything about it. I wanted to be the sybiAn rider and the sandwiched woman at the same time. Thank you

Great story. I would love to be the sybian, hehe

If men could do the same things, and for as long, there would be no need for a sybian.

lol