by jeninflorida
If men could do the same things, and for as long, there would be no need for a sybian.
lol
This was so hot. I loved everything about it. I wanted to be the sybiAn rider and the sandwiched woman at the same time. Thank you
hi,
I don't know how you write, but I might suggest you run your story through a spelling/grammer checker before submission. I saw a few errors but didn't keep a list. The first I noticed was in the paragragh about refilling Taylor's glass. some of the sentence structureis hard to follow, I know it gets difficult to think about it as you get a bit wound up while writing, at least I do. I would suggest you go slowly, taking paragraphs at random, re-reading them individually so you aren't so excited by the story itself.
I liked it a lot and good luck
pandabare
not outstanding. Perhaps it is too pedestrian, slow, and repetitive. The story is about two couples enjoying themselves but the descriptions don't convey that joy.