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by OwnedOne

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
The 6th paragraph told the tale, disappointing

I am highly disappointed. Your writing style needs improvement and you gave the plot away in the 6th paragraph, though, technically the one liner before it was not a paragraph.

Not much meat to the story either and a waste of a readers time.

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