All Comments on 'Taking Control in the Park Ch. 02'

Will there be more? I hope so. The aftermath is so much of any story.

This was good, but perhaps a little weighted down by the dreams. The amount of time spent there seemed to slow the story too much. If you continue the story, it should balance better. The ongoing use of 'head space' versus dialogue is good. The degree to which she was aware of him was surprising and interesting. Keep up the good work.

Please consider more writing!

This is one of the most intriguing, intelligent, and mysterious stories on this site.

I love the perspective change from the prequel.

These qualities make for great erotica and drama. It's not just a rape fantasy.

Both stories are breaths of fresh air among a lot of predictable clutter.