by dr mabuse SOI
You must have been smoking the ganja when you submitted this story. Obviously zero proof reading went into this story.
It was also about 3 chapters too long.
2 stars is all I could muster.
The story line has possibilities, but your spelling is the pits! I suspect you use a spelling checker, because all the words are valid - just wrong in the context. Not to mention all the words plain missed out. Do better please next time.