by ChynaMarie
I can't wait for the next chapter and I hope you will do a series on the rest of the family.
Can't believe you left me hanging like that. It's so good, I can't wait to read more. I'm excited for the next chapter
I just love the McKay brothers, Yes this was short but, it was somethng and I'm loving it still. Also knowing that you're working on my new fav story Mine! is such a wonderful comfort cause I can't wait to see who tore her farm house up. Thank you for writting for us.
very good story u better hurry up and give us more. i am loving cade and lo.
So happy to have an update so soon and of course can't wait to see what happens next good thing Brody and Cade got there when they did cause that guy was a lunatic incredible! Please update again soon thanks!!
So loving this story, I feel so sorry for Loral all she wants is a good and nice life and thought she was getting it but the rug was swept from underneath her. jack STILL needs his ass kicked!
I wish she hadnt slept around so much she seemed like kind of a whore i truly hope she is not pregnant with that guys baby
I think you have a lot of potential. Though the plot feels familiar, you give it your own special twist which is nice. I have a tiny thought: you'd be surprised how a good story can change into a fantastic one with just a little proofreading. There were several verb tense mix-ups and other small things that can be picked up by just reading over the story carefully. I always like to set the story down for a minute, walk away, and then come back after an hour or two and re-read what I wrote. A fresh pair of eyes makes all the difference. Just a bit of advice from a fellow writer. Looking forward to Ch. 4! N4M.
Loral was hit so I do get why Jack got beat up. But the whole thing started because he said another womans name but she also did too so it defeats the purpose of her thinking in her mind that she is perfect. So now there was really excuse in my head because she's just as wrong as him, besides the hitting part.
Even though we found out the truth after that, I was still thinking of that specific situation.
Thanks for the shout out. As always I loved this chapter and I want complain about how short this chapter is....lol...Cannot wait until the next chapter...
This was the best thing that has happened to me. It was like you knew it was my birthday. Thank you so much wonderful chapter.
I am waiting while I twittle my thumbs about this here series...Waited so long for this, now waiting for more!!!
I literally LOVE YOUR INTERRACIAL SERIES:>)
Love the feisty nature of Loral and her determined nature. She takes no bullshit and for a woman under thirty; she is way ahead of herself. Cade will learn she is her own master and can hold things down. Now let's be clear; physical abuse is a horse of another color. Jack was lucky Brody fucked him up. I know girlfriend would have laid him out lovely. A sistah knows how to weigh the scales of Justice the old fashioned way.