by Deity_11
I want to be teased like that I’m dripping wet just thinking about it
I thought it was great I don't know what that other person was talking about but your wording was great I been reading stories for years and YOUR the first to make me wanna leave feed back and I loved it sooo much it made me horny.. KEEP IT UP!!!
This was hot and well written, so good job. The premise was arousing, and for those looking for a quick thrill, this would be a good one to start with.
For me, I like a little more story. I am not sure if this is a standalone or part of a bigger story, if its just an intro to these women, nice... if its a standalone i would have liked more character development, descriptions, backstory.
Still, great first submission :)
Pretty good story line but it felt rushed. There was a sense of unrealistic urgency. Could use more character development. You're in a car and the next thing you're in an office and then on the ground. Wouldn't you be on a floor? And why, what is it about your partner other than the texting is it that drives you totally crazy to desire your partner? Her hair, her body features, what?