by byr0n69
Like your style of writing! Perhaps this story could have been a little longer, with more action during dinner....maybe at a restaurant with the lady under your control in a very public place? Keep writing, you're a natural!
Loved this...my complaint was it was way too short. You could play that restaurant scene out all over dinner - well written as it was - but use the whole meal time - make her think you really might make her come in the restaurant. Push her to the edge!
The remote control vibe is definitely on my bucket list of things to try! I was sad to see it end. The build up and teasing were believable and hot. Please write more!