All Comments on 'Terry's Visit'

Very nice...warm and romantic.

Continue, please. Nice start.

What a wonderful, beautiful, romantic story. It stirred me .....

What is up with the random switching from first person POV of one character to the other?? Couldn't get into it, that is extremely distracting to a reader. At the very least break it up into sections, separate them with a line break or something, so the reader knows you're jumping from one character's head to another's!

Childishly appealing with feeling but without a realistic thought of the storm approaching.

She the distorted child and he the mindless non-caring manipulator. Each childlike as in incest. It was a well written fantasy for him and a nightmare on wings approaching her just as intended eh writer.

Any sales yet?

A romance which could be a dream of many older men who miss the excitement from their lives. Hopefully there will be more of it coming... and soon!