All Comments on 'The Adventure Ch. 02'

After seeing this posted, I took your advice and went back to read the original. The original was outstanding with a new and unique premise. The follow up is also excellent, but needed more. On the one hand, I think you should have ended this chapter with the protagonist telling his wife, then pick up that thread in the next chapter. However, if you had done that, I don't want to wait four years to find out the resolution!

Thus, please get moving because you've hooked me on where this is going.

I too went a read your first part of this story! What a fantastic fairy tale!

I to, don't want to wait 4 years for the next chapter!

And my god where can I get some of that water? LOL

Thanks for writing!

there fantasies and there is foolishness this is foolishness.

...get into any story that has so many words not spelled correctly. That just distracts, you need to work on it.

I'm quite sure she would have got pregnant even if she had put the 'diagram' in!

"I can't get into any story that has so many words not spelled correctly"

Just for you, I went back over the story and checked for "mis-spelled" words. Guess what the spell checker came back with "0". I did find 3 other small errors like "starts" instead of "started", but no spelling errors.

I wouldn't want your hurt you brain cells, so save yourself and don't read it.

Others seem to like the story and have no problems reading it.

I only have one problem. They want some of that water.

Fantasies - "Imagination unrestricted by reality"

How many of you would agree with that definition?

The only foolishness is coming from your lack of imagnation and your fingers on the keyboard.

I am glad you read the story - may be it will open the doors of your mind.

keep em coming!

"The original was outstanding with a new and unique premise. The follow up is also excellent, but needed more. On the one hand, I think you should have ended this chapter with the protagonist telling his wife, then pick up that thread in the next chapter."

That would have been exciting!

Thanks for taking the time to comment and using your NAME.

I hope it does not take 4 years to get part 3 done and posted.

Sexmate: Thank you for your positive input!

I do have something almost as good as the "water"

My hot wife! LOL

PS: Sorry, I don't share her

The past tense of "to lead" is "led." The word "lead" is a valid word; so, SpellCheck would not detect its incorrect use

Ok, it is not a spelling error but a grammar error.

I corrected it in my text file but it is not worth the trouble to the editor to correct it online

S4,

It is wild with imagination. Go for more, please

xtremedd

Story was good do far but did they go back to the valley and what happened if the did?

His feelings were hurt by all the spelling comments.