All Comments on 'The Alpha bet Ch. 01'

Very annoying having to go back and 'decode' every other sentence.

Mysterious and badly in need of editing, but still the idea seems powerful and the creatures that parade through are bewitching.

For the most part, it was decent. I wasn't big on the storyline, but that's just me. It definitely needs work, though. For example, one consistent error you had was when you gave heights for your characters. Saying 6'2"ft is like saying "six feet and seven inches feet." The extra "ft" is unnecessary. Also, there were way too man exclamation points in regular conversation. Maybe you exclaim everything you say, but normal people don't. So overall, it was okay. But get yourself an editor, and make it good. Perhaps great, even.

Didn't like it.

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