All Comments on 'The Artifact Ch. 03'

This was one of the 1st stories I read when I found this site back in '09, and I've been waiting for more chapters ever since.

But, considering how you said "in 6 months" when you wrote the The Orgasm Powered Car back in 2010... it's looking like something went wrong.

If you're at all able, please come back and give us some more of this story. It's definitely worth many more chapters.

Sadly, yet another great story with an author on hiatus. Please continue writing this story you balance the plot and sex perfectly.

Love the story cant wait to see how the Struggle goes with the Evil Guy. and what the House is Like and does he keep all of the Girls or only Sarah.

Hope the surgery went well.....when you can, please post more chapters!

Thank you. Can we please have another chapter soon. It is very good to read a story that is so very will written.

Your story is great. Well thought out, and a wonderful balance between sex and Mind control. Look forward to more.

Your story has many appeals!! He is a Veteran that tries to make a difference with his fellow vets !! In the City of Sin , He tries to help people even in the Show buisness He helps them ; but he is also being helped and used at the same time By the Artifact , most people cannot see this !! Keep up the Great Story line ; and ignore people like timelord1963 ; when there is a talent that can outshine their own it frustrates them to no end!!!

Simply loved it. I'll go so far as to say this is among my favorites on the site. Keep the story going.

This story series seems very cut and paste. Take waitress and insert hotel desk clerk or resturant patron. Hotel to casino etc... In addition, having mind contol over inatimate objects such as slots or a roulette wheel does seem problematic.

I thought if you would have taken the reader to more varied locales Jack could could have run into more varied encounters. Instead of staying in Las Vagus for most the story the rural area may have fit in with the Viet Nam theme.

I enjoyed the story, it was well balanced and has a very intriguing story line. Keep up the good work! It totally deserves 5 stars!

One of the best. I find myself rushing through the sex to get to the story. Help a few more Vets if you can, they deserve more than they receive from us.

This is a great story!!! Please keep it going and keep up the great work!

have made you a favourite to make sure i get the next installment.

I'm a vet from Viet-Nam I liked the jungle story, I enjoyed the artifact tale

You have a good talent, use it.

i read and thoroughly enjoyed your series kudos to you and a job well done. i cant wait to see how things play out. i am glad you didn't just do a straight sex story, but actually had the foresight to add a plot. not only one that is intriguing but one that both dramatic and has comical aspects as well. thanks, and i look forward to seeing more hopefully soon.

IF someone did read the profile: the last modification was in 2012, so the last comment at least is a rumor only. There are to many reasons, why an author stopped writing, so just let us hope, he will find the time, strength and will to continue his stories.

As it is only some more days to X-mas: Merry X-mas and a happy new year, god bless you and yours

He was going in for a possible operation and since he has not been back in over 3 years he probably didn't survive, so doubtful this will ever be finished unless another writer attempts it. If one does please post where to find that ending here in the comment section of this story please.

Absolutely amazing story, one of the best I've read. Extremely sexy but also with a genuinely interesting and exciting storyline to back it up. Keep up the great work, and I will be eagerly awaiting your next instalment.

Keep going, the story line is great.

Am loving this story, I hope inspiration strikes and Jack & the girls come back to play soon!

Keep up the story, I can't wait for the next Chapter.

This ia a GREAT story! Please keep writing, you are very talented. I look forward to the next chapter(s).

I have been reading Literotica for 8 years and never left a comment; this is the best story I have read! Please continue this series.

Ditto

hurry up and upload the next chapter.

all three chapters you have posted till now are great.

keep up the hot work.

Hurry up! The conflict is coming and we are interested in this as a story. Not just as stroke material (though it is good stroke material). Take a hint or 3 from Jim Butcher.com. He has written a guide to writing on his website. To ramp up the tension u need to know more about the bad guy. A great show, followed by the poker game is an obvious next chapter. But kidnapping Julie (with whom are hero has a special bond) and making her a victim of some sexual torture or gangbang would make us realize how bad the evil consequences could be. Chasing her around the country is a good method of raising the tension for a long series. This is almost worth publishing but don't let that carrot lead to a sell out of your vision. Can wait to see what you decide to do.

I know it's been years, but I would love to read more.

Really enjoying this series - eager to read the next part.

Keep up the excelent work.. :)

I've enjoyed the story so far, and I am eagerly anticipating the next chapter!

If you do not like unfinished stories, do not read Alan by julian, in with the simiar stories. He wrote ch. 28 on 06/03/06 and the story is still not done.

Kellyd

Thanks so much for taking the time to write this. It is because of people like you that I enjoy coming to sites like this to read. I read some of the comments, it appears you went into surgery at some point in time. I wish you the best with that. If you really wanted to, I think you could turn this into a novel and publish it. If you get the chance and feel well enough to finish the story, I urge you to do so. I stayed up until two just to finish this, and i have classes. This is as i said Totally Awesome. If you cant finish the story, then thanks so much for writing what you have. I really enjoyed my sunday because of this.

Doc,

Sorry to hear of your surgery and hope everything went well. Get well soon as we all are waitibg on the next chapter of "Coats and The Artifact".

Love the story. And guys, relax. If you had read his post in his profile, you would see he had surgery in April and would be gone for a while. Hope your surgery went great doc.

Great story. Keep them coming. You may want to eliminate the evil one and then have a race to collect the most pieces kinda like Highlander (http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0091203/)

Reading and writing you a Comment . I understand the story is at a critical stage and the next Chapter could reveal alot of things like Sarah onstage and Julie & Kathy being assistants to him. but it seems kind of frustrating to read and end with no conclusion. what is in Scottsdale and how do things turn out for everyone Considering he will most likely get the Evil guys Women that will make 5 at least.

btw Great Story

No you cant stop where is chapter 4, 5, 6 and 7 to tell you the truth you should publish a book seriously awesome story make sure you tell all of us if you do.. this would make an awesome movie.

Just read all three chapters of your story, and thoroughly enjoyed them. I can see lots of directions for this to continue in, and really hope that you do continue it. Eventually, it will need more back story and convergent plot lines to bring together the origins/history of other artifacts of power and how their stories converge with Jack's. He has already begun to build a harem, now he needs to establish a base of operations from which to grow in power, wealth, and influence. I can see many directions in which it can go - perhaps you might invite other authors to join in. If you do, please do your readers a favor and prepare a story bible for their reference, to ensure continuity and compatibility of story lines as they merge and cross.

Yo doc87123!

Please continue this excellent series, I'd love to see what happens next!

topace

this story saddens me because im pretty sure that this will never be finished witch, for a story of this caliber, is the worst possible fate for the readers who will forever wonder what will happen next. Doc if you reading this, finish this story for all of us poor helpless readers who can't do anything but try to convince you to keep writing.

A Simple Reader,

Harry

Have read all three chapters of The Artifact. Sir, I have to tell you so far "fucking phenomenal", that is the only verbiage that comes to mind, the sex is better than some worse than others but the story wowowowowowowowowow!

First of all I love this story, just love it. The concept and idea is fresh and original, and the characters very likable, and the struggles of the people relatable. I honestly think that if you toned down the sex a notch and fleshed out the story a bit more, you would have a prime story for a novel, and very easily a series. Just my opinion

I read alot of fantasy books, and have a wild imagination myself. Coming across this series has given me alot of ideas that have expanded he way I view alot of elements of fiction. Keep this series going, you've already hooked people in and the story is just getting good. Personally I belive a fair number of people read these stories for the sexual stimulation, but your story is Grade A with or without the sex.

Keep it coming! (you could be inspiering new authors you never know!)

I'm in the queue with the others wondering when the story will be continued. You've written a good tale, with or without the sex. That's the best kind. It just needs to be completed.

This series is by far one of my favorite stories of all time so keep it going. I don't think that I will ever forget this series either. What's so great about it is that it really does read like a New York Best Seller novel.

Great story so far, I hope the next installment is not too long in the offing. Please keep up the good work

very good read - please don't make us wait much longer for the next part...

I just found this and while the first part didn't grab me, that later chapters were fun. I really wish there was a part 4

its a very good story that has plot and sex. it is on my top 3 with genie cronicles i like it and keep it mup dont quit on us

Please continue with the chapters - one of the best and most original stories I've read here

You've read it more often, but Doc, you are a pen artist. where is the sequel?

I look forward to the next chapter. This is a very nice story!

Each chapter gets better... Can't wait for the next one!

Best story on the site, just wish you would finish it.....

It has been 3 years now and not another section to the story. when are you going to finish it?

With all the years of just reading, yours is the FIRST that I have responded to.

Keep it up and find an end for all to enjoy, so all CAN enjoy.

More layers added. The story line advances and grows deeper.

Well done.

Hi Doc, thank you for a brilliant story. I know it takes time and a lot of thought to come up with a story like this and can't wait for the next part. Meanwhile I hope you get lots of positive feedback to keep on encouraging you to write quick.

One of the better pieces I've read here.

Even with a deus ex machina to advance the plot, you're still going to some effort to have a story, with characters, who have motivations. Bravo.

Please write more but only as quickly as you can still maintain this quality. :)

hello doc

obviously you can tell by that greeting i`m english.

i really love your stories,

but i feel the same as everyone else .

please plesae please

more stories

or end this one

dont keep us waiting please.

Ok, I'm hooked, love the story. A few grammar/typos here and there but great story. If you want a proof reader on it drop me a line I'd gladly help out. Just keep the ball rolling I think you've got something good going here.

Hey Doc;

Where is the rest of the story "The Artifact"? An Outcry for it's continuation.

I LIKE THE WAY THAT YOU PUT THREE PARTS OF YOUR STORIES TOGETHER. MY REAL PROBLEM IS WHERE IS THE REST OF THE STORY, WHY LEAVE US WAITING TWO YEARS FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER OR ENDING OF THE STORY. THANKS BUT I NEED MORE

Hi Doc,

It would be nice if you could have an ending with your stories, instead of leaving us wondering what will take place in the next chapter or when it will arrive.

Very enjoyable reading with good story line.

Do you right anywhere else or do you go by any other name?

Excellent work! But like everyone else I want the rest of the story! Lol!

Hey Doc, just wanted to let you know that there is still demand for more stories! Although, just reading the comments would have told you that. :)

loved the stories but we need the rest please!

I've never left a comment before. I've been reading these stories on this site for over seven years now. I've never been more wrapped up and wound up by a story before. Very well done. I hope a novella is coming next. This is fantastic stuff.

I stumbled upon this story by accident and was captivated by the title. I could see this becoming a book at some point. I do encourage you to continue writing this story as it is fantastic. I, as others have noticed its been a while since writing. I do hope all is well. Thank you for your time in writing.

Sincerely,

D.

I've been reading stories on this site for five or six years and I have never been interested in either. It goes without saying that this is well done.

How can you leave us poor readers without your gift?! You withhold unfairly, sir! Please know you have a grateful, appreciative audience that value, nay, treasure your finesse with language. Deprive us NO MORE!

Let me add my comments to the others - keep writing this interesting, well-thought-out story!

Why did you not finish this series. It is/was one of the best and you just left it hanging.

Just checking in to see if your still writing. I'm eager for more!

So excited for this story...if this was a book I would buy it. Please don't tease us anymore and continue this story.

When I read erotica this is what i crave; a story that goes with the sex; characters in which i can personally feel their desire. Well done sir, well done. I read every word and I didn't skip to the "good parts". And you've even managed to slip ethics into the piece. Please continue. Don't waste your gift.

this story is awesome and i'm sure i'm not alone when i say we want you to keep writing

So when are you gonna finish this?

Whenever I visit Literotica, "The Artifact" is one of the stories I check on. I found it in June of 2010, and have been hoping that you would let us enjoy the ending or the continuing saga, whichever the case would be. Hoping to hear from you soon.

Hey please continue

I love your stories please you have to make more #1 story on this website!!!!!!!!

HOPE YOU CARRY IT ON...IT IS A GREAT STORY THAT COULD BE AND SHOULD BE CONTINUED!

Write more now

Are you going to complete this story or have you ran out of ideas for it?

Great story! Love the balance between the sex and the actual story! Please post up more, it would be a shame if you didn't!

great story hope you write more soon

can't wait to read more, this is a really excellent story.

hey "doc" u really gotta finish this saga i think it is a great read

Really enjoying your story!! Hoping you will find the time to finish it soon. Keep up the great work!

So when are you going to Complete the story.

he needs to take the Bad Guy down and get to the Ranch.

great story cant wait for more

This is the best story I've read on this site. The sex is steamy, and the plot keeps me reading. I can't wait for the next chapter!

This is what pro writing is all about!!! I'm excited for the series, Charlie mike!!

Please write more about this story! I loved every chapter of it and would love to read more about it! And I want to know how it goes on and what awaits the hero of teh story and what new power he will gain. Dont let us wait to long for more please

The Artifact needs more stories! When? Let me know when you write more to the series!!

Wonderful story, please keep it coming

You have found a very Odd way to bring your story's together. You Have Brought Many strings together in a story, twisting them form a very good story. write and Post More Please.

Really enjoying this series!

Thank you for your incite into the mind of a nice, young military man. Being military myself, I can relate to the character and feel his desire for both wanting to help others as well as slake his thirst for love and lust. Please continue. Thank you again.

great story. Hope that you add chapters and do not leave us hanging.

This is one of the best stories I have read on this site! Well Done! I am interested in reading more.