All Comments on 'The Auction'

if no story needs it

Heck yes, lets have more of this excellent writing...

Great story, great content, well written. I always have difficulty reading and following stories that only use pronouns or no names, but I still enjoyed yours. Keep it up.

I love the way that you wrote the story, but I do have one question. Were you ever planning on writing a sequel to this. I think that I would like to know more about how he was treated and if he regains any memories of her at all. One of the best plots I have ever had the pleasure of reading.

as it is this story is a gem covered in dust and needing some polishing and possibly extension.

" another feeling welled up from within her—she was his. She had purchased him, "

- he was her's or she was his owner, his holder. It is irritating for the reader to have to translate your words into the opposite in order to let the paragraph make sense.

She has known and owned him before? He must have been a boy then. Or was it his father she knew and a child was robbed?

It appears his new owner enjoyed the sight of of a boy expertly taking care of a man's hardness and her gesture of posession announces a lot more in that direction.

So there are some stories left to be told here and a reader would want to see them written.