All Comments on 'The Audition Ch. 01'

I cannot wait to read the sequel. You did a very good job of building the storyline and building the chemistry.

Very good story, but where did her family come into it?? Maybe that bit should be edited out and stick with the main body of the story which is really good.

I pulled up the story because the premise is outstanding---auditioning sexually for the family. That's a spectacular! But the long story after the second paragraph is....sorry...boring and has nothing to do with the premise. Bait and switch.

I'll give Ch. 02 a go. Thanks for writing.

Artless. The way you introduce the weird family proposal leaves no other sane recourse for the fiance but to get the fuck out of there screaming like his hair was on fire!

Whatever your day job is; don't quit it!

Such a problem to deal with in meeting and possibly "meating" the "family"...LOL!!! Love the premise of this story...anxiously looking forward to the next chapters!!!

I am interested enough to see where this leads.