by sassyminx
Not many people are going to get past the first paragraph with that many errors. Please proofread or get a beta.
I think this story shows promise and will be very exciting please post soon and don't forget she needs a bathroom near her little room.
The story is interesting but suffers from a lot of typos and run-on sentences. You would really benefit from a beta reader or proofreader.
What a lovely tantalizing tease! I can't wait to hear about what all you do to her. Perhaps after you have plenty of fun with her you'll bring in a gentleman to share her with? Maybe he can spank the pair of you naughty schoolgirls?