All Comments on 'The Beginning Ch. 02'

From her/she to You.

Chapter one started out well, but then in chapter two you went from 3rd person to 2nd person, which destroyed the story from the first chapter. Sorry, but you lost me at the beginning. Rewrite chapter 2 in the vein of chapter 1, and I think you have a strong story.

I loved the storyline, and the writing was very good. The storyline had great flow until in the end left you wanting a little bit more as it should have included a timeline of being together after the conference, then a short engagement, and finally the wedding and more children. That would make this story positively enchanting. 5/5