All Comments on 'The Best Present Dad Can Give Ch. 08'

missed you, glad you're back and continuing the saga, however...

i liked it; but i didn't feel it with this chapter.

you seemed to repeat your thoughts alot in this chapter. i mean there were alot, alot, alot of repeating phrases throughout this story, sometimes within the same sentence.

the dialogue, at times, felt disjointed and this chapter, like their orgasms, felt rushed and weak.

Maybe I have lost my touch in writing. The rating for this story is embarrassingly low so it is clear to me that you are not the only one who feels this way. Maybe I should discontinue this series and try to write something else...or just stop writing...I don't know...

I will say I am about to read this post and I have enjoyed your previous chapters. I am commenting because my advice doesn't bank on whether I enjoy this chapter or not really.

Not all series can go on forever. People do enjoy HOW it comes together (which in SO many novels and movie sereis, the 1st one is usually everyone's favourite).

My personal preference is a 4some family orgy of complete bisexual swapping of all sorts. Lots of cum and lots of incest as well between moms, dads, bros and sis'! Perhaps just start a new series if you feel down on yourself and come back to this one once your confident you can finish it right?

One piece of advice I'd pass on is write your entire story before you post chapters to it (as all the best stories out there have that beginning, middle, end to them, not just a beginning, middle, middle, flashback, middle etc... with no end in sight). That way you'll restrict yourself from beating something to death, if you even are here that is. I'm not saying you are at all. I know I've made those mistakes though, I just wanted the stories to get SO great for SO long!

That said, if it is truly based off real events, then that changes things greatly. In that case, make sure the reader knows that as that adds an element of arousal to reading it all :)

As all advice is, take it or leave it. In my opinion you don't neccessarily need it as you are a great writer already. Just my 2 cents.

Just don't stop!

Sexyinaf... I just came (pardon the pun!) upon your series last night. I so enjoyed it I stayed up 'til 3am reading it. I read chapter 8 this morning. I was like a kid at Xmas this morning... couldn't wait to get my cup of coffee and sit and read this last installment.

I agree with the prior comment. I don't typically like series, because they get too long and they lose their spark. This series touched a chord with me so it was an easy read, but it will have to come to an end -- and there I go again, LOL!.

DON'T stop writing. I love your characters with the exception of the twin characters. They didn't do much for me. But the father/son relationship is awesome and the Nick/Trey storyline is great. So I must also pose the question... is this based on real accounts? It'd be awesome if it were, but it's a great fantasy if it's not. Either way, it's good. I saw some possibilities with the two uncles, perhaps that's another storyline... just a thought.

Thank you for a great story, I'm adding you as one of my favorite authors!

Best to you,

TexHubby

Great story and although I haven't read all of the parts I have shot off twice so it really got me hot. As a "bitch" for my father and his friends I truly appreciate these stories. My father began fucking me shortly after he caught me blowing the guy next door. I was a preteen at the time and unbeknown to him had been fucking and sucking my two uncles for many months. With that event he became my pimp and would hold parties for guys to get sucked and have an boyass to fuck. When I'd go home with some of them it was just like the story - I had to tell him all of the details of what happened. I did this as he fucked me, holding off shooting his cum in me until the story of my visit was finished. Some times I would have been fucked by as many as 6-8 cocks. He loved looking at the cum still in my pussy and the amount that had run down my ass and legs. Many times he'd get on his knees and suck my boypussy dry of the cum that had been shot into my hole and on me. I loved being his cunt and used by him. He called me his "cum hole whore" and I was glad of it. Every day ended with us in bed together and his cock buried in my "pussy".

you can kinda notice that the highest rated ones, are the ones where Trey is involved. I'm not one to throw a change on your story but I think people liked the fact that maybe Trey and Nicolae make a cute couple and want to see them prevail. I don't think u should stop writing, on the contrary, I think u should keep writing, but please a lot of your fans and others following you and your votes as well, and views that its better when Trey and the twins plus Rhett are involved than the dad.

This series is hot and good! Don't stop, you're very good at this!

I'm a woman and I love gay erotic literature! You by far are the beat I have read! This story is incredible and so hott! I can't wait to read more!!