by Cromagnonman
The story is decent, you get the atmosphere down, and the dialogue fits the genre. But what's with the repeat, it wasn't that good the first time.
I liked the story. The good guys win in the end. I was surprised that when I thought the story was finished, it repeated the whole story word for word again. Can you get that fixed? Otherwise it was enjoyable.
She said it, both times, to get the insurance payout she had to prove he was dead. She didn't. She didn't.
He kept going down the same alley for the first time, over and over again.
His ex partner and ex wife? What happened?
It was bad enough the first time. But to find out the next chapters were just a repetition of the whole, entire, unresolved story was a waste of time!
a waste of time!
just repeats the same story over and over...a total failure....