All Comments on 'The Black Velcro Choker'

OK, why the hell would she and her master want to fuck over the ex husband? And why would her master want his kids? This isn't erotic, it's just stupid :(

Was hoping for some marriage centered S&M, not Mind Control + Cuckholdry. Please place a warning next time. And when is Literotica going to move the damn tags to the top of the page so we can be more discerning in our reading?

Another sick story what pisses me off. What woman would leave her children?

Stop writing, you're an embarrassment to authors everywhere

With the last comment.

I hope someone sane writes a redux of this tale. I can't because I'm not. I know someone who could. If he reads and gets pissed over this trash I bet he will.

Pretty degrading making women out to be mindless. If this is how you really think of them I pray you never meet any.

Sadly I can not; we're actually supposed to believe a happily married woman who loves her husband and two kids would simply submit to a stranger that quick and easy; my God, man, do you really think that little of the opposite sex?

Again I have to ask; if you're not going to put in more of an effort than something like this, why write?

A lot of food for thought - to me, this woman met a master & utterly gave herself over. There was a innate void in her that which made her total aquiescence a given. I enjoyed the power plays described yet wished to know more about the relationships that she cast aside.

It's a given her husband made a mistake treating her as an equal. A man in full would have been more observant of his so-called partner's wherewithals. That being said- he kept his side of the matrimonial bargain struck when they both said "I do"

The husband got screwed over by the system having to lose primary child custody & subsidize an unfaithful wife. One can only hope he has better luck with his next life partner & an iron clad prenup for the same... just in case. At any rate, I thank murphy621 for a first rate twisted tale on the power of those who create credible selective truths.

It' affecting your writing.

I ve wasted my time reading this piece of trash. What a waste!

Murphy this is sick

1*

just another weak willed, slutty wife. yuck not even a 1

Charlie needs a new lawyer and a very large baseball bat.

Do the world a favor and take a long walk on a short pier.

Do the world a favor and take a long walk on a short pier.

this fetish and domination story is in Loving Wives?

or i guess you could put it in fantasy

its easy to figure out he reports her missing and where she might have gone, if she ever comes back, kill her and dump her body in a lot of heavy plastic bags in a real cheap by the hour motel dumpster.

Any woman that even begins to think like this need to be made sterile before they bring more trash into the world.

This isnt BDSM or dominance it equivalent of her being totally brainless and stories of thee mentally ill isnt erotic.

... giving this story a "1"!

**Cheating Wives are lowest form of Life!**

One of the best.

Sorry, you totally fucked Charlie and that just doesn't work.

Love how you wrote her as a useless skank. Basically a life support system for her cunt. Seems some man has screwed you over in the past? Maybe a little penis envie?

was quit his job take all his savings which he should have done when she left in the first place. But take all money and hide even if he had to fucking bury it. And miss lawyer lady got what she did from him. Shit quit work leave the fucking kids with her n Miles to raise. after all in a cpl years he can see them with no problem.A Butlike I said quit work take his retirement acct with him. Again bury it if he has to. And change identity and get a job somewhere else and keep all his money. Maybe Miles is rich and won't care. But also maybe Charlie has some balls and maybe he watches and finds out where Miles lives and after disappearing into the world of the homeless for a while. Maybe one day Miles walks around a corner and meets the business end of a baseball bat. And just maybe soon after Miles ends up washed ashore on a beach somewhere and then just maybe his wife finds out that she is next on the list when she is attacked and raped multiple times by a group of homeless men that afterwards disappear in all directions and just maybe after that she finds out she that she has every disease in the book I'm sorry but either way a woman that would do that and to let someone other than her hubby do that to her. well sorry but they do not deserve any pity. MIles by the way when found would be skinned and missing fingers n toes and a cock all gone..oh the score for this piece of shit story minus 5

But I realize that I don't like the underdog to lose. That emotion flattened the story for me.

You set up how it would be Charlie how would come out ahead in the divorce, and you negate with NOTHING. You wanted it to end that way, but you didn't want to spend any time working it out. That is shitty writing.

She cheats and the husband gets fleeced? And the predator is also scott-free....where is the retribution?? And the husband gets kicked out of his home and ends up paying tru the nose??

Does this happen in real life?? I don't care how good an attorney she had, she should have paid for her mistakes, not the innocent husband. She then marries a total wimp. I hated how this ended. *1* .

garbage just like the author

People like Miles tend to have a short life span.

Wish I could get that few minutes back..

Despicable.

To even dream up something like this speaks volumes about you. I couldn't even read all of it, skimmed through went to the end and gave it a 1*.

The kids are teenagers the husband could have gotten custody and the alimony and support would not have happened. she committed abandonment. this miles guy is not as bad ass is he thinks. your stories are usually a little more realistic and when you have kids in them the kids are either little children who do not understand what is going on or teenagers who are the ones directing a scorched earth policy against the cheating spouse. had trouble with this one. walk up to a woman in a crowded mall and demand her name with her kids wandering around and then she is bouncing off his dick like a porn star and then when the dust settles she ends up with everything and a rich husband. Charlie still won in the end

This story certainly pissed me off, and I can see I'm not alone. However, several commenters have already listed many reasons this story erred and the fact it was really posted in the wrong category. Just because its a skanky whore with apparently no personal fortitude (I pity the women who have a relationship with you) does not necessitate it being in LW. My biggest issue, however, is that I can't possibly believe the teenage daughters accepting and condoning their mother's behavior and living with her. As fucked up as the courts are he would have been able to get custodial rights and therefore the house because they would have chosen him regardless of how much of a shark the "super lawyer" happened to be. You wrote it this way do Mary could come out on top of everything regardless. It would have slightly more acceptable if Miles would have had to put her up, which apparently he could have done easily. Again, not your motive so I hope you are ready to accept the comments you are going to get for making poor plot choices.

This is reality guys! Here in America where stupid fucking judges routinely give custody to the mother regardless of character! If you are a man, what incentive is there to get married and have children? How many wives do you know that as soon as they have a kid start dictating the terms of their husbands unconditional surrender? If he doesn't surrender to her whims - it will be a Nuclear Holocaust in his life! Even if your wife does not turn into a fucking slut, she will likely start to impose her will as soon as she has a kid. She will likely already know the possible outcome of any divorce. In other words, you are fucked from the word's "I Do".

I am not a Muslim, I am not from the middle east, however I have come to admire some of their customs. I am a believer in the public stoning of cheating wives and their lovers. Saves grief, money and the hassle of a divorce. It is a very appropriate way to deal with freaks. BTW you get 1 fucking star for pissing off every normal man who reads this shit.

This is truly a well not thought out story of a fair writer that doesn't think much of the legal system and give good men his personal weak character.

I'd like to know just one thing...where on earth these kind of humanoid creatures come from....this is more than bullshit....pathetic

You going to teach your daughters to be whores too?

with your premis the lifestyle is illegal in this country.If you can prove that she is participating in it she will lose the kids no joke no lie it is something I live with everyday because I am in it It can affct my job my kids my whole life if it gets out

A strong dominant man can make any woman go to her knees and be his sex slave. That happened to the wife of every commenter on this story. They were weak and helpless and could do nothing about just stand back and cry. That is why they come here. They cry out to us to pity them. I know. I've been down that road.

I feel sorry for you. If that is your attitude there is alwys a bullet that has your name on it. Save humanity and please use it. As for this story CONGRADS author this may be the worst story ever in Loving Wives. Way to go. Totally non erotic and banal. I thought this was an erotic website. Tell me what was erotic about this?

Part 2, perhaps?

BUT, I would like a BTB ending were ex husband burns everyone. And I do mean burn!

and I mean without even a hint of remorse for actions.

one sick author

OK.....a somewhat different story, but it kept my interest, probably because of your writing, not the subject.

Boring!

I've got an idea for this author, why doesn't he put the chocker around his neck and go screw himself. Stories like that are sick and just want you to find dispicable guys like that and hurt them slowly and painfully in the worst ways imaginable.

In my world she would have had an accident and that would have ended her and the problem, Miles with all his wealth, also.

thats one body that would never be found cause little sister dont miss when she has her gun

If it would have been me, I would have put a bullet through her and his head both.

She doesn't deserve to live after what she did to her husband.

Waiting for your version of BTB. This one sucked big time.

Really really disliked the story, mainly because of how Charlie got treated.....did she ever love him for there is never any indication that she did, a couple of times she professes to love him, but then proceeds to destroy him and her marriage, then take him in the divorce as well.....Finally, in the end she still comes out victorious with a new husband and her lovers....and where is Charlie after supporting her and the kids for all those years?

Good story. Enjoyed it. Thanks for writing it.

you as a writer,cockold or wimp.

the only person that thinks this good in Matt Moreau

I will not read this story. Thank you for the commenters.

Only some ideas.

Charley is free from alimoney, The earlier common house was sold and half house money will be his. Charley had to wait when the youngest daughter will be 18 years old and without children support money.

He is free for restart his life.................

What we do not know the daughters visited their father or not? Generaly the daughters prefer their dads to their moms and the sons are vica versa. Sons prefer their moms to their dads. This is the matematical statistic average..............

And the idea that her children would choose her over their father? What if Miles demanded her to give her daughter to him on her 18th birthday? Or even earlier? Would she have complied? Would she have sold herself for money because Miles told her to? Would she rob a bank or become a contract killer becaus Miles told her to?

If the answer is no, then how does the author justify one set of morals over another? How does the author expect us to believe that she would do one thing while refusing to do another? For all we know, Miles is a pedo who is using the wife to get to the daughter.

Sounds far fetched? Yes. But then, so does this lame excuse of a story.

For whatever reason she married, it wasn't total, emotional, romantic and exhilarating for her, probably the popular thing to d amongst her friends and Charlie was a catch.

Am I defending her - NO! She became bored and unemotional with life, dreary, sometimes drab, unexciting and blah, blah routine. She was ripe, just had never thought about it and the timing for Miles...was perfect!

Her thoughts and worries about Charles, guilt getting more mild by the day.

Thanks!

Velcro... nah! As for the rest of the story: Weak is the only word that comes to mind.

Could've been more. The potential was there. And not necessarily from Charlie's POV either, just more depth towards the end.

Totally garbage

Dd you notice the above apostrophe making another possessive? Now go back and look at your frst sentence. Husband is possessive and should have had the apostrophe. These lttle thngs dvide the writer from the author. If you ever get a real man to take an interest in you, these sorts of fantasies will fall by the wayside for actual joy and intimacy.

Your choker isn't tight enough, your still breathing.

The sex scenes were too short for stroking, and the emotional scenes were really really short, tat was the main complaint.

Well maybe it might have been set up better, with her unhappy, having to make decisions when she felt her husband should. Needed to be flushed out a bit more.

Chilley

Did Mary happily turn her over to her master, orgasming with joy at being able to place a collar on her own daughter? Hopefully Jodie spiked mommy's KY with some IcyHot and looked for her dad. Not a lifestyle I would enjoy, but I'm not her. Thank God.

Nonconsent would fit this better. Even Fetish or BDSM, but not LW.

And the other comments were right, choker was not tight enough.

This is Mind Control. Pure and simple. Please re-assign it! Magic will always beat Real, so there can be no revulsion of her lack of morality. She and Millie are truly helpless!

Another of Murphy621 super cuckold/stupid super moronic slut stories, at least this husband dumped the whore

Murphy you can write better stories than this rubbish.

YOu are a dumb ass wh should not be writing.

THis same wife helped Murphy's wife to fuck Miles, bcoz Mile is sex god no wife can deny anything, now Murphy is living in dog house, outside his own house, his ex-wife still let him come in house on weekly basis and and let him use his own laptop then posts his stories on litrotica, but he has to suck Mile's cock and swallow all cum. Poor Murhpy, but happy Murphy, atleast we love you enough to read your stories. Keep writing. next tym write from husband's POV, i want to know how you felt.

I was one of the first readers and was so pissed that I gave you a 1* and left no comment. Now, I'm re-thinking.

I still hate the wife & her "master". But your writing has clearly hit a chord. So much visceral rage, mine included.

Surely you knew what you were doing and you knew you were going to rattle our cages. You used tried-and-true stereotypes. So cut-and-dried, never any possibility of it going any other way, no escape.

The husband is a stereotype too. He's not a voluntary cuckold because he doesn't go along and quickly refuses to play, the locks are changed etc but in the world that you' ve set up it doesn't matter what he does; he's totally innocent and totally screwed.

You wanted to do something here. What? Surely, more than just pissing off the maximum number of people?

There's no room for a follow-up but you ought to consider some alternative story.

Miles is pure evil. The wife is pure submissive. The husband is almost superfluous. However, if the female had been single and not married, it would have been more of a "50 Shades of Gray" dominance-submission story.

Do something with this.

With all due respect, in stories like this the illequipted husband should be the winner.

This "Loving Wives" story truly fit the category unlike so many others. The readers had warning in the author's bio and even the comments from previous readers. I thought this a superb example of the genre, so it got five stars, as well as a favorite author addition to my list. I continue to be amazed at the people that read this genre and then pan the author with one star and degrading comments. As the saying goes, "If you can't stand the heat, stay out of the kitchen." Go read something else, like Dr. Seuss.

Always find it interesting how the fsllen spouse "had to" do as requested even eith nothing to lose or present threats . A ch 2 could reveal wht she was as weak as jello... Rough sex and plah dominance doesn't add up to what her character did. Ch 2 could play out the crushing blos she receives when her children abandon her ipon learning how she betrayed the family and continued to wrongfully take money ciurtisy of a blood ducking vampire lawyer. Kids can hold grudges gor a long time once they see ghe light. And when is enough, enough and ghe husband strikes back?

@ Romantic1 Unfortunataly the revenge story fans have 2 (two) erotic webbsites in the World which publishes revenge (BTB) stories only (in first published not second or third...) the Literotica and the Storiesonline. So you must cohabit on LW with us.

Litoretica should device a software so that we can block some writers. Otherwise we shall say goodbye to Literotica.

really not in the correct category as there was little substance between the original husband and wife. btw, the story sucked.

Going by the number of comments, although most negative or strongly negative, it seems like you touched some nerves here. Intentionally or not, "frankly, I don't give ..." but your story did miss, in my eyes, a realistic take on the situation after she came back. He did not agree, tried to keep her out of the house but apparently didn't protect himself enough to continue that line till the end. Hard to believe that in this case "the system" would give her all as a reward for her cheating. Social services should have been involved. The last part, finding a rich husband who is willing to accept her behaviour seems plausible enough to accept. It's the part in between her leaving and the divorce that lacks. If you had taken more time to elaborate and give the husband "some justice", I'm sure the comments would have been much different.

I am not a fan of husbands being shut out from their wifes, being cuck, and then burned by a cheating wife who really did not love him enough to sort her destruction going south !

Very funny. 4*

Realistic? Not even close, but as a delightful erotic fantasy, it worked well for me.

No guns where you live little murphy, cause if anything close happened to anybody I know thats how this stupid shit would end. If you find this erotic you are one sick little fat fuck.

NO Man I know would let her or him get away with it.

If I was Charlie I would have destroyed Miles the minute she got back into the house!

But my previous comment was a knee jerk reaction and was my raw emotion.

First of all I don't care for wimpy husbands and while this guy didn't stay and take her crap, he let an asshole steal his wife. Of course his loving wife had some responsibility as well.

I would have enjoyed the husband getting retribution on the two of them. I guess the theme of most of your stories is the wife gets to mess around and husband gets screwed. So I can understand the hostility towards your stories.

That's what this story amounts to. Miles is a predator. You put predators down. And that's what the hubby should have planned for an done. Your fascination with stronger men preying on weak wives and even weaker men seems a little pathetic. Never had a strong man as a role model? Or seen how they behave. Figure it out and stop having your male characters be wimps. It's pathetically implausible.

The only thing that is amazing about this woman is her stupidity!

you should know by now that m621 is a master at writing fucked up stories like this. Her divorce lawyer could have be Barrack Obama, Sarah Palin or even the Pope and none of them could have gotten that whore visitation. m621's stories are based and created in the minds of cuckolds everywhere.

Not because it was good. Because I found a REDUX. Yay. Going to it right now.

You expect us to believe a piece of shit story like this? I would have killed the wife and spent the rest of mine locked behind bars to keep her away from the bastard.

Even for fiction. I simply don't see a married woman, with 2 teenage children, behaving in this manner. You don't get to the point she was in her life and simply thrown it away for a domineering man. She would have never given him her name or number. People simply don't behave that way. Fiction? Nope. Implausible trash. Yep.

And taken care of the boyfriend forever.

Nothing less is appropriate.

Shit

B T B BRIGADES

I would have saved a buck and used only one bullet...in through the eye of that cocksucker (which we all know he really was, come on now...you know it's true. Bald headed, dark piercing eyes...my ass...Cock Sucker!) and out through the back of the bitches head! I would have gotten the kids regardless of the lawyer. Who're can take care of them with a leaking head. He was actually after her husbands cock:-D

This character is one of the most repulsive I've come across in Lit. The kind of woman who truly needs to be shown what being a slave really is.

As for the Miles character, he will eventually take something from some one who will just kill him. You can't continue to do things like this with out repercussions.

What was interesting or entertaining about this mess? You really are a horrible writer.

wives fuck over husbands and get away with it.if husband get miles too die,than there no others.this story is the reason for revenge.

I believe if I'd been Charlie, I would have killed them all - starting with Miles, Alma the shark second and ending with wifey.