All Comments on 'The Book of David Ch. 04'

This is definitely one of the best I've seen on Lit in awhile - I definitely encourage you to continue posting! Thanks for the great work!

He shouldn't have killed ellie. Still and excellent story and very hot.

...for his 3some of choice. Question is: will it include Chereys?

you killed her still can't forgive you. but 100%

...is a ready "itch scratcher"...My first wife was a brainiac, and, as I found out unfortunately, really missed not sowing those wild oats before doing the marriage and motherhood thing. So she "sowed" secretly and was lucky she discovered STD's that wouldn't kill you...but only after she introduced me to "George" and "Fred" the hard way. It really is true. The clueless husband and dad, never find about their thrill seeking spouses until after the credits run...Oh well...

As I was reading this chapter, I started feeling melancholy. It took me a few minutes before I realized that I was missing Ellie.

Sometimes, when I get really into a story, I will fall in love a little bit with one of the characters. This time it was Ellie.

It would have messed the story up but I wish you had just put her in a coma so she could come back some day. Well, I guess we can't have everything.

Even if I don't like the fact that Ellie can't come back I'm still enjoying the story very much. Good job.

Come the fuck on...Can he keep a girl for more than a fucking chapter? So far he has 'loved' three girls, one has died, and he has broken up with two. Just come on and stop with this terrible twist shit lol. It's killing me.

The Story is progressively getting worse

If you love someone you explore your sexuality with THEM. Not a bunch of random people

While I do think this story has a few to many plot twists, it is easily one of the best written stories I've read on this site. Though killing off Ellie was sad, I think it was necessary for the plot, in particular considering the length of the story. That much material with just one guy and one girl would get old eventually. Besides, at the end of the day, most of us are here to read porn and we need different stuff.

The story is not getting progressively worse and you obviously dont have a clue about relationships, the difference between loving someone, being IN love or being able to understand that if you feel either or both it doesnt mean its necessarily the good or right thing to be with that person. Maybe in another 20 years you might figure that out... Then again you might be in the 60% + of the population that never will...

I wasn't as blown away by this chapter - and that's not necessarily a bad thing. The roller coaster can only go down so many times before you crash and burn. Again the details are very well done, just enough to be clear and communicate the emotions and gradual maturity of David and those around him.

I definitely saw them breaking up - you are good at leaving blatant clues that are somehow not jarringly obvious. I wonder if he'll spend time with Amber... and E-Beth?

Of course there's Cherys, my guess for the one he ends up with... but I'm guessing you'll take your sweet time getting them there :)

J

Nice evolution to the story, and the relationship between David and Elizabeth...how 'mature' of them to move along this way..."friends with benefits"...

Amber, and the other roommates...possibilities there...FOR LOTS OF DRAMA...hope this moves along slowly, yet with some developments...

Dani and Cheryss...still a nice possibility, there; sister and her lesbian girlfriend-go figure that one (I, for one, would like to see them together, if for no other reason than to bond them as to their obvious feelings for each other!!)

Yyyaaayyy...another excellent chapter! **5**Stars🌌