All Comments on 'The Book of Division Ch. 01'

I like stories that are a little strange. This one definitely the bill. You did a very good job. Keep writing this type of stories. I would like to make one small suggestion, and this is just a suggestion. Do more of a buildup on Molly coming to terms with having her head fall off. Have her spend a little time going through the gambit of emotions of realizing her head has just fallen off her body. You might also want Fran to go through some emotional upheaval as well. After all, she did just remove her friend's head. I know it would shock most first timers. Fran could also experience some worry as she prepares to do this. A little "I hope this works" feeling if you will. It also makes the story read better. I wouldn't mind seeing Fran switch her head with Molly's head. A little lesbian play with swapped heads would make for an interesting evening.