by quantummechanic65
it was such a turn on but girl isnt a sexy nickname. And vagina makes me feel like im reading about an 80 year old fucking his dead wife. jeez
It was a pretty hot story, but there's a lot of grammatical errors. You overused the word 'girl' and 'vagina' took away from the sexiness of the story.
While the story was hot, I was distracted by the grammatical/spelling errors. The overuse of the word "vagina" also took away from the "hotness" factor.
Keep writing. But have someone proof it for you before submitting.
Amazing, HOT, well done story. A few oops here and there but easily overlooked. 5+
Love spanking stories, especially teacher/student stories where the student really wants to be punished by being spanked. More stories about spanking, please!