by bsi8412
the writing and the story line keep me enthralled. I love these types of stories. Keep up the good work and I shall be going to the homestead site to find out more about you.
thank you.
simoninoxford
I'm both impressed and disappointed. I'll get the disappointment out of the way first. I was really hoping Ash was some kind of Old Testament Mage or demigod and that Paul was some kind of mysterious immortal, something new and one-of-a-kind; needless to say, when he turned out to be a regular old vampire, I was a little let down.
That said, wow!!!! What a striking talent for writing violence you have! That was just beautiful and sleek and dangerous, and I am not a fan of gore or gratuitous horror at all. I was stunned by the efficiency and brutality, the 'calmness' of the scene (if at makes any sense). It was like watching a vicious fight scene with muffled sound, a kind of peace to be found in the slaying of twenty men in under twenty minutes. I loved the contrast of his mercy and compassion with his bloodthirst and wicked efficiency. This scene impacted upon me like fight scenes rarely do. So well done for that!
I can't help wishing the word 'vampire' had never been used but giving credit where it's due, that was an amazing chapter :)
I really like this and hope it is finished!! An excellent story if you have just begun writing. Can't wait for more of his background with Ash-how they met, why he agreed to change him and what happened to him? What was 'Paul' that he had guards, etc. He refers to 'his people'
I loved the action!! I love a good romance mystery and it looks like that's what your writing. I confess, you have me hooked, so please, have the next chapter out soon. Good luck!!
KISSES,
Angel ;)