All Comments on 'The Courtyard'

Waist not waste and the repeats to the story messed up the flow. You need a better editor

but it would have been a lot shorter and less distracting if you hadn't repeated the first seven paragraphs, then two more later on.

Not sure how this story was approved with the errors. I am working on getting it deleted and will re-submit when it is ready. Please check back soon for the new and improved version of this story. Thanks.