by wishfulthinking
I would pay for the novel.
The twists and turns. The dialogs. The storyline. Excellent!!
Like how the author creatively related different sex sensations with her dream - lying on the grass and then riding a mare. Unique.
No wonder this author is among 'favorites' of half of literotica users and now mine too. Very well written!
I hope there is more! Anxiously awaiting chap 2...
You are an amazing writer, and this is truly a great story. It deserves a happy ending. Won't you please complete it and bring it to a satisfying finish?
This is a wonderful, incredibly well written story!!! I desperately hope you continue it!!!
Please bring it back! I was rereading this story from long ago. Where did the next chapter go? Please please PLEASE repost!
need a second and third chapter at least great begins so lets finish it please
This seemed to hold much promise. It seems a shame that you opted not to finish it. It seems there are others that would certainly like to see more of this story as well.
I'm re-reading some of my favourites, this being one of them. And I remember that there was at least a second part. But I can't find it anymore. Did you take it down or did it disappear accidently?
WHERE IS THE REST?!? I love this. Can you please continue this story line?
i second what Oriynlace said. i just stopped at the part where its revealed that she is his daughtrt, not wife!!!
i'm hooting and barking in laughter here. good one!
I liked the story and felt the drinking was a fictional necessity given the reluctance of both parties. I am very interested in where you will go next!
This story had potential, but you lost it when you required the participants to be drunk before their sex. It fit with the father's bad reputation, but not with the girl's or Wilhelm's. What's the point? A baby from the girl doesn't provide the wicked king an heir, and he still has to give up the Wilhelm family palace to Wilhelm...plus, Wilhelm can't really hate the girl...goodness, she's a treasure. These pieces just don't work for me.
Loved it!!! haven`t stopped reading your stories since i started reading the innocent pawn and had to finish it....lost track of how many i read...gonna keep reading. In my humble opinion, you are a very talented writer.
You are such a literary tease! Please finish it, it was an incredible first chapter.
Love your imagination and characters. The setting is unclear though. Clothing and dialogue are inconsistent with any one era. With a few tweaks it could be made to fit in medieval, renaissance, georgian, regency or even victorian periods easily. Research in your chosen period would help your writing a lot. Writer's Digest published a series of writer's guides to daily life in various time periods that are useful. Keep up the good work! Like others have said, I expect you to be published someday.
this is such a great story, like all your others I wish you would continue writing I would love to know what happens next
please continue this story. it's great and i love the medieval atmosphere!
Please continue the story, I am in suspense as to what happens next.
Man, that's raw! You seem to enjoy leaving your readers out in the cold. You are one helluva writer. Shouldn't you be out there publishing your stories somewhere? I'd buy em anytime and in a heartbeat! But I'm developing a nervous tick over your nasty habbit of leaving unfinished stories in your wake. Puleese finish those stories of yours, pritty please????
there must be more to this it can not end like this...they must of reached some sort of understanding?!
Please finish this story. Don't keep us waiting and striving for more. Have mercy ;(
You are a genius!!!!!!!!!!
This story is very confusing and lots of loopholes as though being cut and paste here and there. You might want to check the flow of the story in the next chapter
You know that if a story has your name on it it most probably is a very good one!! And so is this one! Only downer is that it reminds me a whole lot of a book I read a few years ago, very similar...
I know that this story is going to be sooo good. Please continue it.
Your writing is always an enjoyable read...thank you for sharing your work!
don't leave this one hanging like the novice! please continue tihs one. the characters sound delicious.
Fantastic once again. I like the turn from your norm where these two may not live happily ever after.
Your characters are very well done, extermely sensual yet romantic...keep it up ;)
I love all your stories...it makes me sad that u didn't end some, but i hope u continue this one!
PLEASE if you have any shred of love for your readers please please finish! We need MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE!
Another great story! Please continue it!!!! I'm eager to see where you take the characters.
Please, please keep it coming. First rate, like all your other stories. This one holds a lot of potential! Great start.
This can't be it! She has to have it out with her father, and Wilham has to realize that she was duped as much as he was!!! I need more!