All Comments on 'The Dinner Dance'

Can I enrol at your dancing school,please? I would love to have private lessons from you.

Great start. My girlfriend and I are looking forward to more.

We'll want to know more about Bonnie and Clive (sounds like Bonnie and Clyde) when they get to work next week. Also, I think we need to hear more about Geoff and how he reacts to all of this. Jess

Stilted language throughout, especially in the unnatural tone of the dialogue. I started skimming when you placed a web-link to the clothing catalogue where you saw the dress. (Confession? I was skimming before that. I simply skimmed much faster from that point on.) I find that sort of thing extremely tacky. Your stiff, overly formal characters, a slap-dash milieu, and the absence of any sort of psychological or romantic tension make this a very boring story to read, especially when counting the fact that you narrate like a newspaperman (or woman) rather than a novelist. I know from the fact of where this story is published that your fantasies and imagination are much hotter than this attempt. So when I say, Better luck next time, Try again, I do mean it: try again.

That was great. I would love for a part 2.Characters could be. Heres Hoping.

they use safe sane consensual sex. I get the feeling in this story the men are cucks and he women are sluts, you could have cleared that up. I dont care much for sluts, the danger of diseases is to great.

Good story. I liked it a lot ......... in every way possible!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I liked your premise and plot, the setup was very sexy and the link to the dress page was a nice touch. Sexy and hot in the extreme. I do agree somewhat with the writing being a touch stilted but for me it did not detract from the telling. Bottom line is the story is hot and that is why we are here! :) Thanks! Please write again, soon!

love the story so very erotic and exciting. do please do more parts, i ac see this story taking off big time.

Tiger enjoy so much. They should never marry nor have children. I have nothing against sluts or whores as I long as I never have to associate with them.

My dancing could use some fresh steps!

Can I book some lessons? :+))

Weak, the idea was great, but the author didn't have the erotic skills to make it hot. Why didn't they have an orgy were she got double penetrated by the sexy blokes