All Comments on 'The Dirty Old Man'

But your spelling and grammar are at the level of an eight year old: 'Ruff'? 'Spitted'? Bad writing really gets in the way of enjoying a story that could otherwise be quite fun.

listen fuckbunny it's only a story screw the asshole whom thinks you need a degree to place your thoughts on this site.try useing microsoft word to write your story it have spell/grammer check and then paste it here.

Reading this was an effort. As a courtesy to the reader, please proof read. A few commas would have been nice. The story could have been good. As it was in was just a laborious read.

"Him takes her....." There is no software program that does not have a 'spell check', but more importantly, the grammar is horrendous. Someone needs to 'guest edit' for this young lady and improve her style, story, and submissions.

as title says total crap

I thought the story itself was quite good. Short and too the point is sometimes nice! All in all not bad I thought.

What the hell? First she says that she needs to slow down, then she says that she doesn't care go hard...which the fuck is it? And what guy at 40 is unable to make it pleasurable for both of them. I mean...seriously, what the fuck is wrong with you?