All Comments on 'The Dream of the Fisherman's Daughter'

too much repetition ... too much repetition ...

The thing I really loved the most was the build up, from the moment she started entering the cave until she was finally taken, you built up her lust, the basis for it from the dreams, and the feeling of wanting to bad and being forced to endure until finally getting that sex you desire. Then when it happened it was a very detailed and very sensual sex scene where you really could feel how enticing and sensual the sex with such a tentacle beast could be. It wasn't violent, more passionate and wild with desire and lust, and I really liked that. The pacing was perfect and I really enjoyed it all the way through, hope to see more from you.

Some repetition of phrases and imagery throughout the piece, but those aside a very good tentacle story that was strong in description and had a good build up to the action scenes.

Awesome story ganged banged by a creature. Keep up the good work

Minor errors didn't hurt the story; what did was the same descriptives, used again and again. Use a Thesaurus and make the images richer as well as slightly different as the action intensifies. Keep going because I'd like to see where you are going with the tale.

Loved it !!Thanks was a great story keep it up !!

I liked it too. Sometimes reality needs a bit of a fairytale to make it all worth the effort!

SO HOT. JUST WHAT I NEEDED THANKS

Don't change a thing. Had me hot.

The only way I see to improve really is to continue. Is she there for the rest of her life? Does she have it's babies? If so, what are they and what happens to them? Do they pleasure her too or do they leave for their own cave? Where does "the fisherman's daughter" come from? It's not mentioned.

The best tentacle story I've read bar none. Keep up the good work.

Interesting story. Please consider a sequel?

It was a long intro but you got there and had a great story in the end

This story is inspired by an image called 'The Dream of the Fisherman's Wife', which is the woodcut in the story.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Dream_of_the_Fisherman%27s_Wife

I've seen this picture in Burt Coopers office.

Burt if your wondering is head of Sterling Cooper of the tv show Madmen, and the pic is in several episodes. Inspiring !

Thanks for putting it to words.