All Comments on 'The Drive Home Ch. 02'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Lots of Potential

Like the others, spelling, sentence structure etc. Read it over before submitting. There's lots of good stuff here that could be elaborated on to make this a very hot story. don't just say he gave her multiple orgasms. Go into detail about what he did and how intense each one was. I got hard reading it though, so you're on the right track.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
smh

Not enough build up

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