All Comments on 'The Experiment Ch. 01'

THE BEST!!!!!!18C4

It was a good story, a couple of grammatical errors but nothing a good editor couldn't fix. Overall I really enjoyed it. One thing I couldn't quite figure out was how they went from putting Kathy in the back of the van to suddenly tied to some trees.

He should plant a trigger in her mind so he no longer needs the headphones only say the word. Why did he tell her to hate him? That seems unproductive and the wrong way to go. He should have said you don't have to like me or what I did but u will accept it and crave more.