All Comments on 'The Family Room Ch. 12'

Hey, Mused!

Wow...... what a story!

This is B4PW writing.

This is the second one of your stories I've read, and very well done it is!

I left some nice remarks to your "worth it still" story, which I really enjoyed reading because of your writing style.

I have nothing but positive things to say about this story, despite my serious aversion to pregnancy and children. It had a good plot and solid characters that were believable.

As with the "worth it" story, you added in some delicious humor in this one, too. (At least we got to laugh before we cried.)

As Rick and Julie progressed in their love for each other, it became pretty obvious that they were going to get caught sooner or later, but jesus! What an awful occurance of coitus interuptus! You really know how to lay on the drama.

I really got to hate Erin as things went along, and agree that she got what she deserved.

Thank you once again for your inventiveness and talent as a writer!

Sincerely,

B4PW.

I liked your story, ver much in the last chapter, which brought tears to my old eyes. Especially the second time reading it. Now my friend, you have started a family, one which you should bring to us in more of your endeavors. You have incurred a debt to your fand.

Excellent tale of, what I am sure is, more real them most of us believe. Nicely written.

Loved every minute I was reading, thank you

I have loved reading your novel and I look forward to reading it again at a later date

Top of the class!

Absolutely wonderful !

Not a bad story overall I suppose. I wasn’t really impressed with the ending. I thought you could’ve done more with this story ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

This was tragic love story yet a warm and loving tale. Whereas the ending was ok it would have been even better if the parent would have finally accepted what had happened between Rick and Julie and supported them through it rather than forcing them to move across the country in exile. Story was well written, but I am sorry to see that the author apparently no longer publishes stories here on lit, I would have loved to have read a sequel. 5 stars

I don't usually agree with ScottishTexan's comments, but I do find myself agreeing with him on his point about Dina. She totally vanished from the story after Lance told her about Rick and Julie, the only mention of her being when Julie got upset at Lance mentioning her name in conversation cause she cut ties with Julie due to her relationship with Rick. She didn't need to become 100% accepting and understanding, but some level of closure for her and her relationship with Lance would've been nice. Other than that though I loved it! Really enjoyed reading it, I'm sure I'll come to it again in the future.

Meh...I would have enjoyed the parents coming to terms with their children's relationship once it became apparent that they were serious enough about themselves that they were moving entirely across the country to remain together. Dina is someone else who should have come back to her friend's side and been supportive like Lance was. I would have liked to see Lance marry Dina too.

But it wasn't a horrible ending even so.

Second time around and it is still a great story and it is still 5/5.

My second time reading through this series and it's still awesome. In my head after this chapter maybe sometime after the baby is born the natural love between the parents and their new grandson heals any remaining wounds and brings them all back together as is often the case.

This time through I find myself appreciating that the characters are brought to life by both their flaws AND their good qualities. For instance, I guess a never realized before, Julie really does need to work on her anger issues/violence. The parents aren't evil monsters, but they're not "we always knew this day would come and just want you to be happy" either. All 4 members of the family feel like real people dealing with an awful situation.

5/5

They were both a bit silly, especially him.

But l’m a sucker for a good romance story an this is a good’un.

Scores 5/5

Erin is too poor. Rick is some coward. all chapter is five star.

I loved this series and gave every chapter 5 stars. The only critisisms i have is the fact of what happened to Erin, She was raped for being in love with someone. She was only 19 years old and was forcefully taken by her own brother and raped. Thats my main critisism of the story. I have also got to say that you really made me dislike Rick for a bit there with his hurtful words towards Julie, the woman he loved more then life itself. When he called her a pyschotic little bitch, damnnn, just damnnn. I truly enjoyed every chapter and this story makes me want to find love with someone that is just as complete and total. I have a sister alas i dont think she has ever thought about me romantically. Plz Do Continue This Series. It Would Be Amazing!!!

I read all 12 chapters and I enjoyed every bit of it. Would be great if you revisited Rivk and Julie later I their life together.

Loved it. Read all 12 parts and was impressed. Would love it if you did a return to Rick & Julie's story. It was hot!

I just read the entire story. It was very good and I will be reading more of your stories.

this was really enjoyable. i do hope you write a "follow-up" story or 2 on Rick and Julie, and their life. it would be great reading. this was 5 stars - every chapter. loved the story, the characters - the ending. Thanks.

I agree with Kurinax about the love scenes being the weakest parts but that's not to say that they weren't good, just that the plot was much stronger, overpowering the erotica. It was a lovely story and you cared about the characters, even the broken ones left bellyup in the wake of this tumultuous relationship.

A great read.

The best way to know if a story is good is whether or not you come to care for the characters. It happens very rarely in the stories contained in this website, but you have managed to pull it off. This was a fantastic story. I have read dozens, but this has to be in the top three for the best brother-sister stories I've read. The story had an organic, realistic feel to it. The sex scenes were decent, but honestly one of the weaker points in the story. It was the literature part, not the erotica part, that kept me going. Still, a fantastic story. As far as follow ups go, I think the story has a very satisfying conclusion. Further additions would of course be appreciated, but I think you ended the story very well.

Finally a story in which the woman has honest to goodness pubic hair!!

But it needs a proper ending.

This just leaves us in limbo.

It needs to be continued and finish after the birth - and a possible family reunion.

You should write more about them and there children great job

after reading the 1st page of this chapter i was ready to tell you to "go fuck yourself" if this is how things were gonna end. im not entirely happy with the ending, but its better than the 1st page indicated

Story is wonderful. Thank you for it. Hugs, Richard and Kelli

It was really a beautiful story.In the course of 12 chapters,I have grown to love the characters so much that now after finishing all the chapters,I am feeling rather sad of not knowing more about them.I would have loved for you to write more about them,perhaps moving the grand-parents to the same town as them or even just another chapter for a peek in their lives.Also I would like to thank you for such a great story.I truly loved it.

Every story I've ever read about brother and sister romance always starts with them having sex.Falling in love comes first and the love making a consummation of that love.My sister and I have been together as man and wife since we were 18 and she 19.It turned out that she had been in love with me since she was 16 and Mom knew and had had a long talk with her.Our lifelong relationship began when she asked me why I never had any girlfriends.I told her I was in love.The next week she kept trying to find out which of her friends it was but I refused to tell her.She kept crying and every time I tried to cuddle and comfort her it made it worse.The atmosphere was terrible.Mom said she had girl problems and too leave her to get over it.We were always best friends and very close.We would snuggle up together watching TV despite Mom and Dad saying now we were grown up we should not be doing it.It was innocent I'd never ever touched her sexually.As kids we were inseparable.One night watching TV she asked me if it was her.I told her it was but would never touch her as I loved her and could never hurt her.I told her I was sorry but she told me she had been in love with me since she had been 16.We went and told our parents how we felt and Dad went mad.Mom got him to calm down eventually.We have not been apart since over 40 years.Great story but it does not work quite like it does in stories.

You made a grown man cry.You are an amazingly talented writer.Do please continue this so long as it's a happy ending; there's far too much horror and sadness in this world.One thing I've learned is that we all need to get happiness were we can and as long as you are both happy and loyal to each other nothing and no one else or even societies rules ever matter.Thank you

This really was an excellent story.

No matter what blood relationship there maybe, true unadultered love cannot be forsaken, contrary to every bodies morals.

You brought two young people into out lives showing the true emotions of growing up and finding out about sex, love and the values of true love against unadulterated incest.

You showed us the damage and hurt it causes in a family expectantcies and and environment.

Many people have had relationships with siblings and if we are honest we know that.

It is hidden and not talked about, but it is true and it should be more acceptable in situations which this story gives us.

I hope you will continue with more stories about Julie and Rick!

I loved the story and hope that you'll write more about them.

Is it just me or someone else also want to smack the anon that commented on 18/12/13 so far up his ass that he wouldn`t know where his ass ended and his mouth began?? And I`m saying this by pointing him just because his was the only derogatory comment I read. The story was perfect and it was the happy ending that even on a site for erotic tales put a smile on my face. I don`t understand why anyone would want a tragic end for someone else? Yeah I`m posting as an anon too so call me a hypocrite all you want.

I enjoyed these stories immensely; a great tale of an unorthodox romance that was bound to have it's concequences but in which love won over in the end. The deliberation of the protagonists and the heart wrenching angst were beautifully delivered whilst the love and affection was sincere and heart felt. A truly wonderful series about Rick & Julie which could easily stretch to a few more chapters about their lives together if the author so desired, and seriously who would begrudge them their happy ending just because it was predictable, in the end it's what all of us want isn't it?

Of course I'd like to see more on this story; even if it was just a 3 page epilogue. Regardless; even though it's just a story, my wishes go with them.

I've read thru all of the comments and was surprised that no one else wanted an update on Erin; I know that she "was" a manipulating slut and in some ways deserved what she got, but I was hoping that she would've learned from it (as we can see in her last appearance). I was hoping that the jolt straightened her out and she'd play a part in their future, as a friend.

I was surprised to see that one comment alleged that Julie turned out just like Erin; WTH? Where did that come from? Apparently that person doesn't know anything about hormonal imbalances, mood swings, etc... caused by pregnancy. Dealing with everything else was bad enough; then adding in those issues, whew!!

Thanks for giving us a chance to meet these new friends;

DKP

How predictable. You'd think I'd be impressed, but no. No, I'm far from impressed. I invested hours into these stories and it decided to start going downhill from Chapter 9. Horrendous. How unfortunate for you. You decided to conform to generic fairy tales and gave this long story a "happy ending".

That was amazing, it reminds me of my life almost to how my life has turned out. I'm 25 and I have a sister who is 23 and we got together a few years ago and when we came out to our parents we got treated pretty much the same as Rick and Julie. I had a best friend Leo that we confined in and let us stay with him for a while til we moved to a different state and got married and now have a 3 year old together.My wife and I love this story it really touches our hearts and. u are an amazing author and you have loyal fans and readers for life,we thank you for your gift of literature

Amazing story nothin else to say!!!!!

There is no denying that this is truly a great story. The only thing I care to say is thank you very much for giving us Rick and Julie. I can't even articulate how deeply this story affected me. So I couldn't even imagine the depth of care you must have to have to bring these two to life in this story. I would welcome more of they're lives together if you see fit. But if not understand that you created something that has had an impact on me that I will never forget. I hope you continue to lavish us with more of your wonderful stories.

p.s

The only thing I wish was to have been able to read about they're baby and the love they could share as a family as only I believe you could possibly write.

dis is the best story i ever read on this site..... it has so much of emotio.....couldn't stop crying.... :'(

I'd like to see these characters again.

I saved this story to read for the past 2 years, now i've read it; i was blown away! The love, the struggle, the guilt, the commitment, the pain, all were written to an immaculate point of view. Very realistic, i laughed, cried, shocked all the way. Seems very real, best story in literotica.

Thank you for sharing. This was a truly great read. Loved every bit!!!!

Great writing. Would like to see more stories. Thanks

gr8 story....wud love to read more f ur similar creations...

You have to be the best author that I have read on this site. The characters were given depth and rich detail. The plot was viable and seemed to be based in reality. I also appreciate a writer who takes care with spelling, grammar, and vocabulary. I read all 12 chapters in one sitting. I look forward to reading more from you.

Incan whole heartedly say that every chapter all the way to every word was the best I have read on this site what a fantastic tale. Simply put it was perfect in every way thank you so much for this wonderful emotional roller coaster of a story thank you

I have read and re-read all your stories, and you are truly a fantastic author, you can and should write a book, share your literary talents with the whole world as opposed to only men and women looking to get off. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story, in my opinion the best story you ever wrote was the 12 part series, The Family Room. If you ever decide to pursue a literary career, email me at twhaolmkaesr@gmail.com, I know people from OutskirtsPress and I could put you into contact with my publisher, Stephen Pellegrino. He is a real good guy.

u r the best incest/romance author on lit!

Turns out Julie was just like Erin, but the story in an of itself was very realistic, there are consequnces for their behaviour, not all good

This was the best story I've read anywhere. So much emotion and so very real, it may have been fictional but believable. It moved me to tears, causing me to remember something that happened 60 some years ago. I was 17 and my sister was 15. She wanted to become a woman and experience it 1st with her big brother. I was to scared of possible consequences to both of us and chickened out. She was very hurt and cried that I would not make her a woman. Over the years I've been glad it never happened,and yet always wondered what we both might have missed out. We were very close and loved each other so much. Just once? I always wonder what it might have been like for the both of us to loose our virginity together. What if? It will always haunt me to my grave. Now in our middle 60's she still will stare at me at times and smile with a little mist in her eyes, somehow communicating the same question to me, 'What if, even if it was just for the one and only time"?. I think I cheated both of us something that would have been a very beautiful moment/memory. We both lost our virginity eventually, and we both said it was not something great or beautiful, memorable, and not with someone special.

Thank you for such a wonderful compassionate story.

A Moment Lost, A Memory Never Made! . . .

This kind of love stories can bring tears to the readers eyes. Such passionate love is impossible to find in the real world. You have taken the love and affection between the siblings to a new level. Incest or not, this has to be one of the best written romantic story ever written. Hats off to you man!

I don't have enough words to praise this story. I'm truly speechless :)

One of the finest works I've read on this site. Hell, one of the finest works I've read, PERIOD. And no one cheated on anyone! Perfection. It was beautiful, and loving. Plus, add an "a" and subtract an "e", and the main female character is the love of my life! Convenient ;P I would LOVE to read more about them, so long as the quality wouldn't suffer, and you wouldn't resort to having one or both of them cheat to add "excitement" to the story. Absent those two issues, you couldn't keep me from reading that story if you tried. EXCELLENT work. 5***** from me!

My title says it all. AMAZING! Out of the many stories I have read in literotica, this is the best thing I could ever read. The plot was amazing with drama and romance. I have always looked for that in stories and you by far have been and still are my favorite author.

I liked how the story was more realistic than most of the stories have read on Literotica. I also like that you wrote from both point of views and it would of been better if you had did that from the beginning. The story was one of the best.

This is perhaps the most romantic story I have read in Literotica. The brother stays loyal to his loving sister. But the best part is this story is it avoids orgies and threesomes which weakens the romantic factor of strong love bonding

a very good plot I'd love to read more

I have read plenty of top stories on literotica...but this IS the most brilliant story I've read so far

Kudos to you Mused :)

Great story. All the elements together make it very exciting: the real love of a brother and sister, the suspense, the heart-wrenching separations and drama. And a happy ending. For me the sex is incidental, a compelling story plot does it every time.

Thank you for such a beautiful story.Once I started I could not stop.

that my friend..... was beautiful.

Absolutly spellbinding a love story I will never forget. the sex was secondary to the wonderful relationship of brother and sister, BRAVO

i really loved the story, i read it all from beginning to end, and the way you described the characters feelings for one another is mind blowing. i wish i could keep reading, this is one story i wish didnt end. i so hope you bring them back for an even longer and more exciting adventure. i hope you get started writing as soon as possible. this is the first time i have ever read something like this and, holy shit i'am left speechless. even though i dont condone the behaviour, just the taboo of the story sent chills up my back. from ur newest fan.

Love it!! I had to read all 12 chapter in a row I couldn't stop reading. I really hope that you bring these characters back so we can see how things turn out in Oregon!!!

You are such a talented writer. I enjoy all of your stories, but this one is definitely my favorite!

One of the very, VERY best! I like the characters, the story, the emotions shown, well, i absolutely adored everything about this story! Some awesome work!

Ignore your detractors! - totally realistic and emotional! - I know - I lived it long ago

rick was right no way should they have kids the way she went after him she would deffinetly kill the kids she is one pshyco girl that needs to be in a mental hospital why would he even think of taking her back

DBRS

I thought this story was amazing! I really got into the story and got really pissed off at Rick about the whole abortion thing and was calling him an idiot until he finally went to her window. I began reading it because I have read your other stories and I was not disappointed. You really are a great writer and I want to read more of your stories, including what happens with Julie and Rick. I liked how you gave your other stories a sequel and explained what happened in the characters lives. Please do that with these... They deserve it.

The only thing I don't like is making almost every part about 2 pages long and having multiple chapters. It just got confusing trying to figure out which chapter I had read. Thank you for a great story!!

Loved it, especially that it was a decent enough story that actually reflects life and has near to reality emotions involved. This is definitely up there with the best writing I've read on this site thus far.

one of the best stories i have read. keep writing

I liked the beginning but I disliked the drama with the father so all in all a mixed reaction to the ending but over all a good story.

I'm not a huge fan of the idea of incest, but I actually really enjoyed the series. I liked how vivid the sex scenes were, and also how the storie wasn't just sex, it was a legitimate story.

It would be REALLY cool to have a story that revisited the characters a few years in to their new life.

The one thing you really need to work on it your grammar:

It's = it is. Ex. "It's three o'clock."

Its = possessive. Ex. "This is a dog, its favorite toy is a tennis ball."

You're = you are. Ex. "You're a great writer."

Your= possessive. Ex. "This is one of your best stories."

Etc. (I'm sure someone could proofread it for you.)

Great story, keep up the good work.

~Jessica

Nice series..Liked your style

As well as the Worth it series, this story didn't fail to deliver on so many levels. If you could do me a favor and show me more stories (Brother and Sister, not mother/daughter, mother/son, dad/daughter, or dad/son) that're similar to this one =P. Or even similar to the other stories i have read. It gets really frustrating when a story has a misleading title and the story is just absolutely NOT what i'm looking for xP...

trully one of the best .

It's so very strange...This is probably the tenth sibling story i've read in 3 or 4 days, and all of them are completely amazing and unique ^^. This one was amazing, probably the longest one i've read so far other than the Loving Siblings series, and the authors name never fails to escape me =\.

Sadly i had trouble being creative with this story though...and ended up reusing the image of the character i had for Summer's End. What drove me nuts? Well i guess there were only two things really...Erin and Sam, also how she kept avoiding to tell him her news :P. Was like "Omfg just say it already" xD.

Great story though, took around hmmm...6...7 hours to read? i think lol i can't remember when i started it, also hopefully i can find more authors like you, and well not only you but the others i've found, who's stories are just filled with lust...Sibling stories like this are very, hmmm extremely special :).

I have been a member of this site for many years now and although I'm not a writer myself, I had to comment on this story and offer my congratulations to you... This is one of, if not the best story I have ever read on here... Like so many of the others who have commented on this story, I would like to see a sequal to it... I would like to see something showing their lives in Oregon, how their parents cope with having a grandchild, etc... Please consider doing a follow-up to their story...

I loved all the characterizations that you developed on this story, the depth of their developement, and just the raw emotion that the story portrays... It is almost as if this were a true story with true people...

Fantastic!

One of the best things I have read here!

Please make more

you are one of the best damn writers ever. You should be writing books. You're writing is tasteful and sexy without being gross. You're characters are brilliant and full of depth. Got to give you a 10/10. Brilliant.

Wow... just wow... This story was incredible.. Please, PLEASE Please... WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!

Right now, that's what i am, speechless. Your writing has got me wet the whole story! I think i squirted too many times while reading this.

I have just gotten into this site over the past month or so and have read quite a few of the stories under this topic. Mostly they are more about lust than love. Then... I happened across your story. I started reading and found that I couldn't stop. The depth of the two main characters is palpable; it feels like I know them or would like to. You did an excellent job of taking a love story and intertwining it with a "taboo" subject and a bit of sex. Now that I am finished with it, I find myself longing for more; what happens next?, how are mom and dad going to cope with a grandchild that they can't tell their friends about? etc, etc. This is definitely the best story I have come across on this site thus far, and I am hard-pressed to imagine that I will find any better. My hat's off to you. Thank you.

Mused, I was hugely impressed with this story, one of very few I have read which treated the difficult subject of love between a brother and sister as more than just a sex story. I read it from start to finish, unable to put it away. You have very well depicted the pain and the joy, the love and the guilt, the mixed feelings, and it was an exceptional treatment of the reactions of all involved — parents and children — to discovery, pregnancy, and a hopeful ending. Whether it was truly realistic, I can't say, but it was wholly believable. The characters were rounded and genuine, and much of the descriptive writing, especially of the emotions involved, was worthy of reading again just for its own sake.

Others have commented on the confusion caused by your swings from first-person to third-person narrative, so I won't add to them. It could have done with a little better editing, but the errors were not enough to stem the flow of my involvement in your love story.

Two final observations: to those like Theartofsex who still believe that brother-sister sex is purely a fictional theme, and that their children would inevitably be "horribly deformed" - this is a Victorian myth, like the one that masturbation makes you go blind. There is a marginally higher risk to any baby born of an inbred blood-line, and incestuous babies come under that heading. But it happens: brothers do fuck their sisters, who sometimes do get pregnant, and their children are generally bonny, normal and happy kids. The problems are the social ones, not the biological ones.

Finally, and this is a piece of advice, just my opinion: don't be tempted to write a sequel. Your story stands well enough as it is, let others imagine their own continuations. Few sequels match the original. let alone enhance it.

this was the best story i've read here. it touched every emotion that i could think of and then some. please finish it with an epilogue or another couple of chapters at least, just to see if they can overcome the stigmatism and lead a semi-normal life together

This was the best stories i have ever read! Great job :)

Without a doubt this is the best story I have EVER read. Erotic, romantic, and so beautiful all at the same time. You are an incredible writer.

i think you did an awsome job with this story i would love to hear more about them and if their family ever talks to them and how their child turns out health wise i mean i still have a ton of questions like do they have more children how does thier new life in oregon turn out and more so i am def lookin foward to a family room 13 through 24 great job

this was by far the best longer story i've ever read. it ended perfectly but i would love to have an epilogue or maybe several.

This has to be the best story series i've ever read! Really well put together and thought out, with the perfect balance between believable story and sex. Hope this is just the first of many by yourself.

Why does Rick drift from first person to third person? Other than that, very well written!

You are a great writer, and I really liked the story. It was very well writen.

A few constructive comments:

-What if Julie and Rick decide to adopt a baby instead? I agree with what you said about having a baby be the ultimate show of commitment, and it is fiction, but it's just not believable. The baby would most likely be horribly deformed or have a mental disease or something, brother sister sex just doesn't mix in that way. but it's your choice.

-Also, can write really well, and you are great at descriptions, but make sure you don't make it to wordy or anything, don't get over zealous with your writing. As I once heard it, when someone reads a story, they should not even be aware that they are reading words on a page, it should just be a picture flowing through their mind, over complicated sentences can prevent that, again just a suggestion for improvement

Over all, it was one of my favorites! great story, you could really feel the love between the two.

You can definitely write. If you aren't doing this professionally, you should. I finished two of your series in a single evening, and that's way more reading online than I normally do.

You are a great story teller that was just wow i went to bed a 3 n the morning halfway through and finished it just nowyou should definitly keep it going

and they were all great none lost my interest really and I read them all in one sitting but I liked how you had your main point of view from the story but still switched from time to time the ONLY thing that bugged me was around I think chapter 8 or 9 when you were changing views you seemed to get the views mixed up it confused me but otherwise GREAT I love all your stories read them all :)

What else can be said, this is by far the best story on this site. I have never been so enthralled with a story like this. Except for Harry Potter, no story has me so intent on reading it. I thank you for writing it. Stories like this define what "Literotica" is all about.

Once I started to read I couldn't stop. It would be nice to read more hope you continue the series. If you were ever published I would certainly buy!

That was the most amazing story I've ever read the whole harry potter series didn't contain the emotions that this story has. Keep up the great work.

Great story, well written. I do think Rick was a selfish git, and his father was right in that Rick betrayed him in the very worst ways. I'm glad they ended up happy, but I doubt they really care about the damage they caused along the way. They still blame their parents, but it's their own fault. Rick's fault mostly. If there's ever a sequel, I'd like to see them both have matured and realized their selfish love was just that, and hopefully find a way to apologize to their parents for hurting them so much, and then go on and live their lives the way they want to. I like Julie, but I'd hoped Rick would've grown up by the end, and he didn't.

A rare jewel, it is amazing to find the rare jewels among the sea of plain stories with little emotion. It was a roller coaseter ride of emotion and I loved every rise and dip. I would love to see these characters revisited in the future to see how they are handling raising a child and coping with their new life in a strange town.