All Comments on 'The Fight Off The Matt Ch. 01'

For a first story I do not think You need an Editor But considering the Grammar Nazi's out there it couldn't hurt . Hope you write more of your Story.

To everyone who commented on this story i thank you. Just wanted to let you guys know that still haven't gotten a committed editor but have worked to get my second chapter submitted which has been rejected once already unfortunately due to grammar issues. I also wanted to point out that all of the answers to your many questions will be given in time throughout the story. If there's one thing i know how to do with writing is to answer as few questions as possible in chapters to always get people guessing. It gives the readers a reason to continue following the story to the very end. thanks again phil89

Wow...masters couldn't even get this dude...yet this chick did....HELL YEAH! update soon I HAVE to know what happends!

if he has the skill to beat all these masters why does he need to join a dojo?where did he learn what he already knows?why pick on old men and not the best student of the house?i was always told how it takes a big man to beat up on old people.i will say this though if ariesgirl likes your story you have done something good since she usually has good points to make

I enjoyed the story and hope you continue with it. It is not easy to put yourself out there and I hope that you find that your ability to capture the reader will progress as you evolve as a writer.

Not a bad start. I'm a fan of martial arts movies, shows etc. Continue on I will read.

You warned readers that you needed help with editing so don't late the comments stop you from continuing. I would like to find out why Matt is on this journey to challenge all these dojos.

Well established writers make mistakes that is why they have editors to help them polish their work before its released for readers to buy.

it's a good start

I'm at least interested to see where this goes, but please do fix the mistakes. Also, try to make your chapters longer. I personally really dislike less than one page "chapters" because it really breaks up the flow of the story. I'd rather have a slightly longer wait between chapters that end up being more substantial in length and content then little wait between broken short chapters.

To be honest i actually submitted this to site there were indents at the beginning of every paragraph. Also the 'u' instead of you's were a complete mistake on my part due to the obvious texing I've been doing. I apologize to everyone for missing those errors. To be perfectly honest when it came to english those top two instances and spelling were the only things that kept me from getting completely scolded by english teachers. Thank you to everyone for all your comments whether they be constructive criticism or words of encouragement all is appreciated.

When I read it's the story that I'm seeing. Not grammar, not sentence structure, etc., just the story. I enjoyed this beginning and hope to see more of your work.

Thanks!

Alan

Drop the text speak. Use 'you' instead of 'u'. Fix the run on sentences, grammatical errors, and spelling errors and you have the kernel of a decent story.

Wow .....more please