All Comments on 'The First Encounter'

I enjoyed the first part of your story and didn't mind the shorter length because it was good for an intro that led quickly to a bit of action.

My one complaint would be that the switch from past to present tense was a little distracting. There were some grammatical things that were the kinds of mistakes that I personally find myself making when I am working quickly.

That being said, I respect anyone who puts a story up here and I really enjoyed yours.

one complaint, needs to be teased out longer

I loved it! 5 stars!

wow love this first part of THE FIRST ENCOUNTER

just getting into it now i want more . i can see this being a real hot horny story .

love the writing now do waste time start to write the next part .

Very exciting. Next time read through before posting, there were a few writing errors. But I wait eagerly for the next chapter.

waiting for the next (longer maybe?) chapter

Well written; good spelling and grammar along with an intriguing plot line. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Your description and style bring me right into the story. Very intense. Looking forward to the next installments.

but next time, read through and edit a bit more before posting. Lack of consistency in your tense is a little distracting.

More please

I really would have liked a longer first chapter - but I am curious and excited enought to want to read more

Can't wait for part 2.

Great build up and scenario. Change of narrative tense distracted a bit but the characters felt real enough for the story to work. Thank you for sharing.

a few writing issues, but you have it. Thank you.