All Comments on 'The First Night'

A romantic account of a long-anticipated joining. Beautiful detail and atmosphere. The only distracting occurrence was the switch between the names Will and Jehu.

Loved it. It wasn't just about sex. It was pure love, their anticipated union. And he wanted to make sure she was well satified for their first union. The writing, tone, language, and descrpition were excellent. I especially love his profession of love, so beautiful. However, I was confused with the switching of the guy's name and the paragraph needed reworking, otherwise this was awesome.