All Comments on 'The First Noel'

Very hot story, could have had a bit more detail him cumming in her but overall very sexy. I hope to read a next story of them and the life they had decided to make soon.

...but it strangely, was as beautiful as heaven, too.

Time of year - irrelevant. Story - slow to build into a really hot and sexy offering. I loved it - and want more!!

Lukas

i loved it great on detail could of been better on that but still you did great i caint wait to see the next one that you will no dought do just as well

Beautiful story. I loved it. So did my sister. We've been together for over 40 years and are still in love.

...what a hot story! I greatly appreciate a brother/sister love story where they profess their love, and look forward to being "married" people. This tale had the best story line ever...the slow build-up, the seduction, the sudden confessing of love...WOW! Not sex for it's own sake, but as an expression of their love. Thanks!

Jim

This is a wonderful story. You paint such a vivid picture with your words. Thanks!

Absolutely beautiful

That was simply 'brilliant' !

Your descriptions of them together was just amazing, possibly the most sensual and exciting I've read on here

5 Stars does not do this justice.

WOW !

I know that this story was written a long time ago but I just want the author to know that it really really really had the right effect on me....OMG! I want a Red Headed Sistah!

And to 'Anonymous' - 'Unrealistic' ....for someone who can't even spell 'definitely'

you have a lot of nerve criticizing ANYONE'S story or writing. Troll.

Dierdre is such an uncommon name in fiction. You must have played fe4

Others have commented on how much they like the story, and it's enjoyable indeed, but also a bit rough in places. A couple of times, there's a word missing, and you have trouble with the past tense of 'to lie', as in 'to lie down'. It's 'lay'; 'lied' means 'did not tell the truth'. Don't get an editor, that'd be overkill, and I've seen some editing that still had plenty of errors. Just read your story again, and again, and yet again, and don't let your brain fill in the gaps. It's not easy, but your story would benefit from it. Keep up the good work.

There’s nice stuff here and I love stories about redheads, but you need an editor.

Specifically, two things killed my boner. One, using asterisks to show emphasis is very chat-room-RP and bugged me. Two, and this is important —

“Breasts that would make babies hard” is the worst, least sexy phrase of all time. 🤢

Enjoyed this story very much. The love and passion between the twins shone through like headlights on a dark road.

The spelling, the grammar who cares the story more than made up for any lack of proof reading.

After reading first about the brother and sister snowed in at the cabin and now this tale I am hooked on your style and stories. You really do the title of "MrIllusion" justice! Keep them coming and I'll keep reading.

I don't often comment but just had to share my appreciation.

how could incest be a sin? Adam and Eve shared the same DNA and being the only people on earth at the time, had to commit incest to populate the world, as did their children and grandchildren etc.

Nicely done!

Sooo wonderfully lovely ! That is what the world needs. Absolutely nothing dirty or gross, only grace...

This story is oh so romantic with love, passion, emotion, and it’s erotic! Very well written. Too bad Mrillusion didn't continue the story or add an epilogue to see what happens to Cillian and Deirdre in the near and long term. ;-p

A beautiful story