All Comments on 'The First Time'

You can sugarcoat it, drag it out, give incredible orgasms, but the chance of this couple making it is about zero. Any couple that enters swinging to help save their relationship does not have the inner strength to keep the couple as one.

I liked the story and the premise.The writing is not perfect. A little distacting when Janice becomes Janine.

That's the only thing I can think of to explain the incredibly unprofessional writing in this "story." The "writer" should complete his elementary school education before trying to write another word.

Thanx to all for feedback and I've duly noted the errors I made in my submission, (Janice/Janine- although it was only two mistakes!). I also agree that the relationship is destined to go tits up! I can't, however, return to elementary school as I'm English and they don't exist over this side of the atlantic. However, if the anonymous person would like to leave some contact details I could send them some of the writing I undertake as part of my job and as an aspiring author, before making such an insulting judgement based on something I wrote for my lover in less than an hour!

I could'nt post this comment without submitting a rating so I'll go for the average, cos' I know I can do better!

Not bad but why all the drugs???? Is that really needed?